That was a great story! I really like it!
titpuce86

I just finished reading your story on early pass.
I was confused at the end with a lack of clarity of which dragons had flown which queens.
That aside, I greatly enjoyed reading your epic story and found it to be most enjoyable. I only spotted two omitted word type of errors in the entire document.
I would have liked to see more of the charterers and how they were affected by thread, the overall experience.
Do you recall the cannon for the shortened name of a rider, during what year, or pass?
You have written a very nice story that was such fun to read. I had taken a ten year break from Mccaffrey, and was pleased to find that she had taken up the pen again with her son; how nice that others are allowed the same license in fanfic.
I would agree with you that the number of readers to critique ratio is rather low, and wish you luck in generating the reviews that will help you to become a better writer.

I really enjoyed your story.
Regards,
L.
(an author on ff too. For some reason I can never remember my pw and login to sign reviews, but if you are curious, you can see who I am-
Happy writing

This is the best bit of Pern fanfiction I have read.

Could be mistaken for Anne McCaffrey work. please write some more.

Ah, fabulous. I'd lost track of this story and found it again tonight; absolutely brilliant, but I still want more. Only thing was I got a little confused with some of the relationships and pairings of queens etc, so a "family tree" could be useful? I really enjoyed this, very well written and interesting, it really does shed some light on things that were glossed over or left out completely in the original books. A stunning piece of work and one of the best fanfictions of any genre that I've read. Congratulations.

This was a very pleasant surprise. In a very vauge overview, you were able to keep me spellbound while not repeating yourself. Another thing that tickled me was the way you played out the characters, as they are not your creations for the most part.

Drifting towards the technical aspect momentarily, spelling was fine as was grammer. I did note one or two words that were stuck together,though I don't recall where.

Perhaps the most important thing is that I was able to see everything in my head. I saw the flights, the hatchings, the never-ending construction. And it sounded real, it convinced me.

So once more, a very good read. Thank you for an enjoyable few hours of reading.

Geo~

I thought this was really good, nicely written. It fills in a good gap too!

Hi. I very much enjoyed this story! The subject of how the first riders adjusted to draconic mating really needed to be addressed, and I'm glad you did it. I feel like you shied away from some of the touchier conversations, though, because your writing gets a little unclear when they come up. I don't know if you want to know about exact passages in this story, but in the future, just make sure that the prose clearly refers to the thing you're talking about rather than slipping into euphemisms or saying "that" more often than not. Dialogue, of course, is another animal.

Overall, though, well done. I like how you handled the relationships between dragon and rider, and rider and other. I especially like that the dragons sounded like dragons! It seems like many people have a hard time with that.

On another note, I noticed in one of your other stories (which I plan to read) that you're a fan of the PPC. If you're interested, please visit us at our message board: http://disc./Indices/199610.html

Just make sure to read the Constitution before posting. {= )

~Neshomeh, unremitting Pern fan and PPCer.

You fill in the parts great. I like it.
Keep it up hope to hear more stories from you.

Hey, that was a really wonderful story.
You´ve catches exactly McCaffrey´s style of writing.
You should really talk with her or her son. With your talent you could easily take part in her authorsessions at dragonhold!
This story takes the plot up exactly where she left and continues it to her later stories.
It´s just wonderful!

Even though the story is long done, I'd thought I'd add a review, anyways.
This is the best story I have seen so far of and well thought out and written. I certainly applaud you on this fine Fanfic, and look forward to more. :)

Hey,
I really enjoyed it, well done. I like you writing style, it is a easy read but still resonates with the emotions people are experiencing. I never realised that of course dragons would mate with various queens and the enormous strain that would place on relationships. I like the part about Michael and the toy dragon, lovely.
all the loves
Louise

You are the ultimate Pern writer. McCaffrey should hire you to continue the series, as you obviously have it so perfectly down pat.
I burst into cheering as Porth laid her 21 eggs. I didn't do that in any of the actual BOOKS hardly!
Thanky ou for writing this, and I hope you continue to write more.

This was like looking at a lost manuscript from Mrs. McCaffrey. Your words have a very commanding flow, with clear descriptions that let me "see" the action like a movie, and no sign of sickening purple prose.

The humor was subtle and well appreciated, and you brought out the humanity of all the characters, which is hard to do given such a large cast. But somehow you gave them equal attention, and presented them so realistically as people still adjusting to their new roles. Sometimes the humanity of the characters is lost in fanfiction, but you brought home the differences, military, sexual and ways of thinking, between the budding weyrfolk and the holdfolk.

I was especially drawn in by Tarrie and Alianne as they dealt with the rampant emotions involved in their first mating flights. I wanted to hug Alianne, and good gods, when Porth blooded, it invoked phantom tastes in my mouth.

There was a distressing amount of "try and" rather than "try to", though. Sorry for the nitpick, but I always wonder when "try to" stopped being proper.

Anyway, I loved the optimistic ending, too. I'm an absolute sucker for those. It really seems like the beginning of a legacy.

Thank you for writing this. I'm sure your Roo likes it too; it's a fine tribute.

I enjoyed reading this, thank you!
You made it interesting and true to the 'feel' of the Pern stories.
Great work.
:o)

I have long been a fan of Anne McCaffrey's PERN books; those books brought me hours of pleasure when I was growing up, and helped get me through some rough times. DRAGON DAYS is not only one of the best PERN-fics I've ever read, I dare to say you have captured not only the spirit of the books, but the "voice" in which they were written. As with all stories, there are a few typos and a couple of missing words here and there, but nothing that spoiled the reading for me. It is a well-written piece of fan-fic. I laughed and cried, and ached when those eggs didn't hatch, but I could not stop reading. Please tell me you have written more PERN-fic. I loved this story.