Very interesting; one of the few tastes of the world of Zelda I've encountered. I did notice a missing "e" in "lake", but other than that (since I have virtually no knowledge whatsoever of the world... *self-effacing laugh*), you did this quite well! Very enjoyable, with a meloncholic feel.
Take care,
~September's Nobara.

This is an interesting summary of OoT. I like the way you've broken each section of Link's memories with a "Flash!" It really makes the reader feel as if they're in Link's mind, experiencing these memories with him. I like the mysterious ending, but I feel stupid because I don't know who the girl was at the end. I assumed it was Zelda; is it? Really though, I did like this story. And I really felt sympathy for Link when the Kokiri were taunting him. Poor Mr. No-Fairy. My only complaint is the fact that I can't figure out who the girl is at the end. It's probably something really simple, but I just can't figure it out. It's still a really good story though.

Gray eyes, gray eyes... Have you noticed that in OoT they nearly everyone has either blue or black eyes (or none really visible)?

First things first: paragraphing. Normally, I'd find single sentence paragraphs not very powerful, especially if used to the extent you have in this fic. Fortunately, it works: the uncoordinated feel of the sentences fits nicely with the tone of the story (a nice beginning paragraph, by the way: "a life has left the earth").

There are some questions to why Link's asking "why". The given chunks don't really give an answer, partly because we're not sure what the question is. Why is he dead? Why is he alone? Why has all this happened? We're not sure what the question is. That's fine, except that the flashes don't feel like they're building a solid picture for us. Maybe that's what you wanted, I don't know.

But while we're on teh subject of flashes, writing "Flash!" italicised doesn't really feel right. We get the movie picture you want us to see, but it's clunky. Maybe when you go over to edit your works in the future you may want to replace the flashes with something else: incomplete sentences maybe, those which when strung together give us the answer to "why".

I'm assuming that this thing isn't meant to entirely follow chronological order. If that's the case, I suggest a bit of rearranging; it was noticeable in the first half (and worked quite nicely) was that each flash became progressively quicker. The "back to white" had a nice length as a finishing chunk (although a bit of experimentation might show whether you want to end with a flash or not), but the above two were a tad long. Maybe you were ordering it in terms of meaning though, so visual aesthetics aren't as important.

Overall, I like the vagueness and disconnection that covers this short piece, but I get the feeling that sometimes those two have been pushed to the point of tripping. Still, it's a good work, and with a bit more polish will be great.

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oh i liked it. but who was the woman at the end with the grey eyes? that wasnt zelda was it?

hm. interesting!

although you do realise that the first paragraph is repeated. repeditiveness sets the mood, though if its a mistake you'll want to correct it.

the only other thing would be to be a bit more specific about the woman at the end, I'm assuming link's mom, or zelda. though maybe someone else.

very good, but the plain sentances get redundant instead of mood-setting, add some description.

Very interesting. It's sort of the Zelda timeline in a nutshell. I hope to see the next chappie of "The Legend of Zelda" soon! Good luck!