How come a ninja-boy (leme twra) can't do actual physical combat? Plus that little-shit Ayame is annoying Sasuke. Anyway, whatever the plot, I like your whitty writting. One thing that kind of annoys me: the short dialogues; one word from one person, one from enother person. It makes me dizzy. Try allowing more speech to your characters. Keep up the good work!

Nayako

Great! Update soon! Can't wait!

ah!Sasuke! Ok, don't get me wrong here, I'm not some child-molesting freak, but only reading about sasuke makes wanna jump back in my highschool years. The original story is very very good for a first attempt, I think you goot it going on. Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading so that next time I'll be able to leave you a more helpful review. Ganbaru, neh!

Great job! Please continue with it!

Really good! Please continue!