I read finish this story within 2-3 days(i guess) and I've always been excited by the romance you wrote so all-in-all. IT WAS WONDERFUL! I love it. I mean I tell that to every author I fav but seriously, great job.

LOL, i was being a teacher but I'm not, I'm only 14. Hehehe.

Peace out, Shiyo.

Aww. That was unbearably long. I liked th edrama but sometimes I just felt like you were feeling sadistic. You had her get raped and then later gave him amnesia? It was like some sappy daytime drama. I did like the butterflies and I'm glad they get together. Your OC Kaede (sp?) was a *&%^& and I hated her but I guess that was the point, wasn't it? Ah well, it's a good fic, faults aside.

Aww, this was such a cute story, Shini! (We miss you btw, where have you gone?)

I would say, however, that you need to read back through the whole story and run a spell check on it - because there are some pretty obvious mistakes there. So word processor and then self-proof read :)

The Epilogue got a little confusing to read at times, I'd recommend either using full names or nicknames, but not both (possibly because it's late and I'm being lax, but I got confused, thought there were more people than there were)

And finally, when you talk about Shino getting drunk on whisky: whisky is STRONG. It wouldn't take much for Shino to get drunk if he wasn't much of a drinker, and he would almost certainly throw up drinking straight whisky without being used to the taste.

Anyways, that's all for now, and overall, I really loved the story! AWESOME! <3
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It took her little legs a long while to find it, but when she did she couldn't help but stare in wonder... it looked exactly like Shibi-sama had said it would. Big, dark, lonely, but with cute little bushes around it's gates.

PRICELESS! LMFAO

this plot is developing quite impressively :D not that it hasn't been XD

just a few typos. other than that, you're golden :D

OMG THIS IS SO CUTE!

but Naruto!? oh hell no!

omg this is so cute!1 I LOVE IT! :D

[Hope you've enjoyed the read, and that it was worth it!]

Definitely. It defintely was. The typos, a few of which I pointed out, were not nice to see and usually that would turn me off of a story, espeically one with so many... But the CONTENT of this was just too good. I really appreciated the actual story!

[Their father stood leaning against the counter top, holding both of their mother’s hands as he refused to let her past to get the lunch; instead his kikaichuu were slowly hauling the load to the kitchen table where their children sat silently watching them. Shino smiled brightly down at his wife,]

Husband!Shino is adorable. I knew he would be! I'd be in love with him too!

[ because in the end, he loved his family dearly. And his family felt the same.]

Aw!! ^_^

[But in the end, it all works out.

True love never takes needless journeys.]

Eh... I suppose. *grumbles* But so much horrible stuff happened! But once you get to this point, it IS hard to be like "I wish that or that hadn't happened..." Because it's all in the past! And now you're so happy and you don't care. You can look back on the hardships and not mind so much.

Anyways... I liked Shikari a lot! And even Hiiro! I think I will be checking out those one-shots you mentioned! :D

And now... LUCKILY I have finished reading this just before midnight. So I shall be going off to sleep now. Ta! But thanks so much for the story, I enjoyed it!

[Shibi twitched again, and smiled at his old team mate.]

AH! His old TEAMMATE! OH! Everything is so clear now! OHH! *sees everything in a new light!*

["... I love you too, Hinata-ai."]

You know. That's nice. But that's where he should've explained why he loves her. Most guys do that at this point. Well, in movies at least. And in books. And this is pratically a book. It's very conspiciously missing. And it's just... right. It's the right thing to do. He really should've done it. :/

[Scary Hanabi was one thing, but scary Hanabi and scary Hinata..? The wedding plans had been put on hold for a week...]

Lol!

[Shino saw a stray glasswing butterfly, flying its way south out of the cold, and smiled.]

See, you write some really flowery, mushy stuff. And yet he couldn't give a single speech about his feelings? >:/ *jipped*

But yay! They're married! That's nice. I actually... can see them being quite a wonderful couple. I like the plans that were laid out in the contract. Sounds good to me! xD

Awesome! I enjoyed reading that, which surprises me. Because, especially at 11pm, I don't usually like to read things that detailed. But I didn't really see this coming, and it wasn't loathsomely boringly detailed. It had a certain... feel to it. If I wasn't so uncertain about how Hinata and Shino will react, I think I would be blissfully happy because of it!

Yay, I liked the ending of that. He got in her way. She better stop and talk to him! Melt into his arms and be all in love. Well, maybe not the last bit... but come on! 96 freaking chapters, all this crap and not-crap that's happened! It's time, goshdarnit!

I would like to know that too!

I love that I can't predict this story. The one I read before this... It was not a predictable story but I was on a roll or something. But that's no FUN. It makes you feel good, but it's not as fun. But this story... I can't guess. WHAT are those scrolls?!?!

Now, that was nice. I KNOW he loves her deep down. And the way she ran past him... I'm not all that surprised. But this entire story he hasn't seemed like the guy that talked to Neji after his fight with Naruto and told him about his twin brother and what really happened. He has not been that way. So I didn't really expect it. But I'm a complete daddy's girl. And I still sorta kinda wish that Kaede would DIE for being so horrible (that "oni-girl" ha! I have to use that phrase someday xD) but I haven't really wished that about him and now I definitely don't. He told her she'd be a good leader someday. Wow. And I like him better just for the fact that he hugged her and let her talk.

But he didn't react to the story of the rape! O_O

"awe" <-- you always type it like that, did you know? You add LOTS of 'e's to things. Like "breathe" instead of "breath". And you have the weirdest spelling of "Ohayou Gozaimasu" I've ever seen. "Ohayoo!" What a retarded looking word that is...

I've been meaning to rant about that /forever/ now. You need a beta. To read this and fix all that for you. Um... I think you can ask for one of the forums of this site. Or, you could just put a note in your profile, or even the first chapter of this story...

Anyways. "Aw{e}!" Shino finally remembers! Yay!

Yay for boys! Ahahaha! xD Is that a cryptic comment? I don't feel like explaining it. *strokes face* How can I put it... I liked that kiss. His heart still knows he loves her, even his memory does, and his body certainly does xD He just won't let his brain accept it. But I think he was on the verge of it. I'm surprised that Hinata yelled at him. She should've just understood about the Kiba comment and simply corrected him, and stayed. Why did she leave like that? She needed to stay. :(

No, they should really tell Lee. He doesn't deserve to not have a chance to get over it, or to find out in a bad way. Doesn't deserve that, I say!