Wow, you got right inside her brain and picked it apart masterfully. Great job.

I most like. Great writing, great assembly of Chloe's thoughts and feelings. Jack... wow... he was excellent here.

please please please a squeal because it was very good written so please update a squeal.

I think you captured Chloe better than anyone else. And I can't get enough Chloe. It might be fun for you to write a story where she is undergoing a routine psychological evaluation at CTU and driving the doctor crazy.

um, i know it says complete and its a oneshot and everything, but, sequel, please? Please? PLEASE?

by the way, very good characterization:)

I wish something like this would have happened. Barry was completely annoying and pointless. I love how you portray Jack and Chloe's relationship. I love the implicit trust you show between them.

This was good, you kept chloe in character very well, considering it was her emotional side showing. You got her dialogue down perfect, I could imagine her saying everything that you wrote. Very good descripitions!

"Tears were weakness, she’d learned that on the elementary school playground. Nothing she’d learned as an adult had counteracted that lesson. Tears would only be mocked, or pitied. She wanted neither."

I really liked that line! Good job!