wow i treally liked this 3 part story it was really good keep up the good work ^-^

oh my God all three of these were so cute...you kept them completely in character the whole time, too, and tasuki helped lighten up some parts.
and i loved the last line, it sounds SO much like something tasuki would say, especially in public. ^_^

LOVED IT! An dof couse Tasuki got the last word in. All three parts are now on my fav stories list! Later!

Beautiful! Heart-warming and well-written. Thank you for sharing this story! :)

*clap, clap* Great job! I luved it! ^-^

I absolutely adore this love story! That poetry-oh my-was soo good! Did you write it-if you did then you're very good! Finally Chichiri gets a girl-and what a perfect girl for him! I loved the dancing as well-not too many people describe dancing, at least this typeof dancing-and it was great! That gypsy woman was great too-I think she's related to my mother!:) As always this was great and I hope to read more of your stuff!

Very nice work. Your descriptions are lush and evocative, your original character Hikari has depth and complexity, and I of course always love Chichiri and his underlying, latent passion.

Just a couple of word-choice concrit remarks: In the line "Now, as she remembered all that had conspired between them, she blushed scarlet" I think you want "transpired" instead of conspired, and in the important confessional scene, "Chichiri, the easiest way to say this is to say that I love you because your you", please be sure to use "you're" instead of "your" in that sentence.

On the whole, however, these are just a couple of small errors in an otherwise grammatically correct and well-constructed story. I especially love Tasuki's playful shout at the end. You write with a great deal of emotion and skill. Good work!