This vignette into Jekyll's thoughts is wonderful, or has the potential to be. Your words are lush and razor-sharp, vivid, visceral.

Only a wee bit of problem with grammar, or sentence construction. Like, "It is far above me, at least, now." The comma before 'now' is not really necessary; it breaks the flow of thought. maybe you could write instd 'It is all above me now, this.' And "I puzzle this, then remember I cannot spare time." Forgive me if I'm mistaken, but perhaps it shd be 'I puzzle over this'.

Just a few little things here and there. Other than that, keep writing! The talent is there, u just need to take it further. Good luck.

~Charl

Wow! That was good!

Wow! Great story once again! Keep up the good work. Just wondering, do you know if they're performing Jekyll & Hyde anywhere soon?

Ooh, that's eerie and hauntingly beautiful. I love all your fics! Keep writing!