Oh, beautiful. Love the analogy and the warm references to Jayne's past, and most especially your writing style.

Ah, I like this story; very sweet. It is insightful, and provides that possiblity for a R/J relationship. Plus I love any coverage of Jayne and his Ma.

Outstanding. Don't need to say more. Cheers! ;-)

Wow that was amazing. I didn't seen the end coming. You did it beautifully.

With all those Rayne vids you made, I wondered whether or not you were a fanfic venturer aswell, and I'm so glad to see that's the case! This was a really poignant read, I loved Jayne thinking about his Ma, then Betty, and then River - it didn't feel forced at all, and the thoughts just seemed to flow together. I also really like the idea of him being the only one who can ground her when she's gone to the "bad place", it seems quite fitting. Great fic!

I really can't tell you how much I love this fic. I think Ive read it at least twenty times. It's just perfect in every way. I love mama cobb and teh fact that Jayne realises that Bety is liek River. Honestly, can't praise this enough.
BTW-- before i forget again I also love "Opposites attract" vid on Youtube, I think it's yours (same name and all). Do you have a web site as I'd love to have the vid on my comp?

Wow. The last line was the real tear jerker for me - and what a buildup! Slow, and beautiful, and tender... and yet tense at the same time.

The last line releases that tension, and yet somehow brings another, stronger one back in. Amazingly crafted.

So in character, and I've read so many stories with these two characters with him taking care of her that doesn't make sense. You manage that so convincingly I couldn't help but get lost in it.

Thank you!

~Frenzy ;

That was a very well executed story. I was surprised. A beautiful comparison between the gun and River was fantastic. I cannot express how perfect your story was. You captured the characters flawlessly. Well done. I'm adding it to my favourites.

You should write more Rayne.

My only critique is that I doubt he would send a letter on paper, it would take months to get there. It is the future, so wouldn't he send it electronically.

Gave me the chills, this piece. Quite beautiful, in that Jayne-beauty way. Strange how a bulky muscled mercenary can project such elegance, isn't it? Don't know why, but Jayne makes me all sorts of poetic. Good job capturing his essence.

Sere mi Eru...Lady Scribe of Avandell

Really like this.

This was well done. You took an idea, developed it patiently with lots of description, some humor, and filled in some of the Jayne backstory, which is always good, too. I like the way you gradually brought River into the piece and showed the likeness between her and Betty. It gives a very believeable, emotionally realistic view of why Jayne would be protective of River and like her. Great job!

I loved this so much. Excellant writing, great concept.

so happy you wrote! wonderful as always.

I always love reading your Serenity (or more to the point Jayne/River) stories. You really put so much character into only a few pages.

Nice that it looks like only Jayne can bring her back to focus and how he can see that she's good at what she is but hates herself for it.

Hope to read more!

Beautiful. So very touching a perspective on both Jayne and River.