CUTE! so going into my C2...

Wow.

That was my initial reaction.

Five minutes later, and I'm still gaping at my screen thinking 'wow'.

I love your characterisation of Draco in this piece. And the interaction with Harry was written so well...I would love to read on, if you're planning on continuing it, though I can see how nicely this works finishing right here.

I think that your introduction -particularly the way you described the mythology- worked wonderfully as an indicator of what was to come. Of what might have happened after Draco called after Harry. It leaves the reader with a feeling of resolution, even though it appears that the story has only just begun. It's almost poetic, really.

Anyway, I'm babbling. And I should probably get back to my essays (Many 'bleck's).

Wonderful work! It really was a treat to see something new up under your penname.

Thanks for sharing,

Luv Neat

*Squeals loudly, causing everyone in the computer lab to look up in alarm just in time to see the girl in the red bandanna fall off her chair in a pile of gibbering goo at the utter fluffy-angstiness of it all.*

That was so BEAUTIFUL! So well written and so... CUTE. So SAD... SO... SO... *Squeals again, unable to come up with enough good words to describe it*. I love your work. I really do. *Luffles your profile page*.

*Eyes the computer technician/monitor guy coming towards her with a very purposeful expression that clearly suggests that Kitai might just get thrown out very soon.*

Eh heh... bye! *Dashes*

Hmm... I think I've read this before -- but loved it just as much now as I did back then. :-)

*snarfles DT*

aw thats so awsome and cute and sad but really good!

you some how got them to stay in character but had them come together... and it all made sense... congrats! its brilliant!

cya
Squeak XOXO

This is a lovely write. I quite enjoyed reading an incharacter where JKR could so easily write if she were not so busy setting up the protagonists to kill, maim, and destroy so much.