nice. a bit quick paced with most of the suprises taken out. If you continue this at some point, which would be very good to see, possibly leave some things alone that happen despite what she tries.

An interesting story. However, you are in desperate need of a beta.

plz update

this is turnibg out to be one of the best nabikixranma stories i have ever read!! update soon!

AND! I need more, I say! Pweaty pwease, with a cherry on top?

-Dani, your most faithful slave.

Geesh! My previous grammar and spelling are horrendously atrocious-and it is ALL your fault! If you hadn't made me so excited to read my next chapter [okay yours, you wrote it] I would have checked myself...as it is: GREAT CHAPTER!
I have become addicted to your words, so therefore I urge for MORE, MORE!

-Dani.

I'm sorry! I jumped the gun! It was a flashback! I should have just kept reading, next time though I would appreicate it if you mentioned this so that I would not go all beserk on you! Byez. I lied your authors rant since I have given a similar one...hehe. you write good, be happyy! Everyone has their own style, and one should not conform into what people prefer but welcome advice and suggestions but decide which ones are good. Life has many choices, and we form our own way-we can not follow everyones! We'd be like Aesop's fable of the donkey, the old man and the child; some wanted the child to ride the donkey, others the old man, and some for the 'poor' donkey to be left alone. I say, it's your life, live it like you wanna and by that I mean:

WRITER'S FREEDOM OF EXPRESSION!! Write the way you want to, not we are reviwers want to, because then you'd be dead before you satisfied everyone.

-Dani.

Somethign weird you said, you first say he went to get a gift for Nabiki [so I assumse she is still his fiancee I hope] but then you say some prince kidnaps Akane and he rescues his intended. WTF! I want Nabiki not AKane.

What very 'naughty' horses you have there, can I pet them? [smirks!]

Wow, this story is cool! Added to favorites. Update son!

good story to read and what happens next to ranma.

Rather good.

You should earnestly consider employing a beta-reader or two to proofread and edit your work. While you seem to be capable of creating an enthralling plot, I found it difficult to enjoy the story and take it seriously due to the numerous errors in spelling, grammar, syntax, word usage and punctuation.

Add some detail and slow down the story a bit and this could be among the great in fanfic history.

ranma was not this mature when he got to the tendos