i liked it

good poem XD

Is this bout me?

I believe this poem was a good ideal. But, there's still some mechanical in this author's writing. Which make this poema little dry. I will say I admire this author for taking a risk.

One "your" should be "yours" and one "your" should be "you're". Other than that this poem is great. You should write more poetry.

I think u might just have a future in potery. Very good. Keep up the good work. Hey u going to update your stories soon? Can't wait!