that was good love the story

m. i love your epilogue! so LEMONYY *rubs fingers together*. keep up the good work :D

Ha! Don't like the end? I love it! I was actually going to write a fanfiction using something exactly like that before I read this!

Anyway, it was much better. The grammar isn't horrific or anything, and the plot is lovely. :P

Well, I don't have time for another chapter, so I suppose I have to say you're my new favorite author! I'll read the rest when school's out. It was a pleasure reading and reviewing your story...

Wow, that was really good. It surprised me, especially for this being your first fanfiction. There's really nothing left for me to say. It was good and I'm going to read the next chapter even though I don't really have enough time.

Good job.

Well, this chapter was slightly confusing. I mean, the concept was pretty clear, but actually reading through it took some time and effort. Great job though. It was very good.

I think I may have time for one more chapter...

I'm glad to hear that you're editing your story. I'd prefer good grammar over length at any given time. Actually, I like short chapters with good grammar. I don't often have a lot of time to spend reading these, so when the chapters are short, it means I can pick up another one more quickly.

Sorry if I was going a tad too ** you. I suppose I failed to notice that this was your first fanfiction. I guess I get carried away with good stories and intend to point out whatever mistakes I find. Good stories mean good authors that can handle the truth.

But the story is moving along fantastically. I'm really glad I started to read it. Who knows? Maybe by the time I'm done, you'll be one of my favorite authors as well...

Anyway, on to the next chapter.

Alright, more than one line. Well, this is going to be a short review no matter how many lines it is.

The story and the plotline are fabulous. This chapter did seem really important and it was noted. The grammar isn't really all that bad anymore, and I think I can stop nagging you now. But watch that repitition thing I told you about earlier. Open up your vocabulary a tad and this wstory would really take off...

Well, it already has, but for me it would be 50x better.

Great chapter. I'll finsih the rest of this story soon, then move on to the sequel.

Damn you and your God-forsaken cliff hangers! I'm really pushing for time now, but I have to read the next chpater.

Great job, by the way. I love your story more and more with every chapter.

Well, it was another fabulous chapter and I hate these stupid cliff hangers.

Great job though. Grammar has improved greatly.

Best chapter yet! Great job.

I don't know how much more of this story I can get through before I die of suspense!

Anyway, great chapter. The grammar is getting better, as well as the plot.

But now I'm finally starting to notice the OOC that is le aking into your story. I don't mind- it definitely helps the plot move a long, but I just thought I'd point this out.

1) Yay! Go SasuNaru!

2) Great chapter. Loved it.

3)Congrats, new fav story.

4) GRAMMAR!

1) Can't wait for next chapter.

2)grammar is better than the length of any chapter. It's hard to filter through too many errors and enjoy the story at the same time. Great job though. I love where this is going. If the next chapter is just as good I may add this to my favorite stories...

These reviews will be short and too the point. I don't have very much time left before bed...

1) Very nice. I love this chapter.

2) Watch the repetition of words. sometimes you use the same word too much at one time.

well, this is a great chapter. I really want to read more, but I have to go to school. I'll be sure to read the rest of this story and the sequel when I get home. It seems interesting and I LOVE NaruSasu pairing.

I'll read the rest later. Great chapter. :D

excellent