Supposed to have been posted 21 October 2011, at and the Coruscant Entertainment Center in my The Critic's Two Cents. but I had problems with my computer, and flaked on attaching these reviews to the original story threads for the last year. Everyone say; 'Mach is a flake, Mach is a yo-yo'. Better yet (Waves hand) 'Mach is trying, but he's still a flake'.

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KOTOR aboard the Endar Spire: When you're bored with the game, here's something to try...

The author has a sick sense of humor, recruiting Trask and the Sith to start his own evil empire, stopping the attack because he's bored.

I like it!

Pick of the Week

I look forward to your reworking of this! And yes, walkthroughs can get QUITE boring in the long run.

I've read through the first chapter, intend to read through the others a bit later. In the meantime, I thought I'd say, I like how you've done this so far. Mynock definatly has the air of a frustrated player (who might be using one to many mods), while giving it good humor for those who know the inside jokes.

I might point out, I liked the "Loading...Loading...Loa–" section. It added to the humor. I feel sorry for Trask, though, but he does tend to get annoying in the begining. Though a bit morbid feeling, I liked how you ended the scene about Trask, since it tied the scene together. I'm surprised we didn't see Mynock having fun annoying or confusing Carth.

I'm having fun reading it so far, I intend to try reading the other chapters a bit later. :-)

Fish, you're nuts. Now do something that works for a long run. Mynock makes me laugh. so does Phish. and Jury. and the glitches. Shutting up now.

Devastatingly funny, as usual. There were a few parts that were really funny, but as I'm holding onto some remnant of a life, I won't go through and quote them to you. That was my best attempt at imitating your style. I like the idea of a democratic empire. Oh, and if you ever need an extra beta-reader I'd be happy to help.

I like the way your story is progressing, your unique style really shines through. Though I have a bit of constructive criticism, (since I like getting it myself), it's just my opinion so take it or leave it. I think that you're just a little lacking in your setting and descriptions, I suppose that is fitting with your rather cynical view, however, it leaves the reader somewhat lacking. Overall, though, it was another great chapter.

Ah...dry, sarcastic and cynincal. My kind of humor.

Yeah, I've played this game once too often, with a severe lack of innovative names. Mynock Spit. If I ever have a kid...

This is awesome! Your writing style is perfect for this kind of humor. I hope you continue through the whole game, but i guess it could get tedious writing it, just like playing it does! Keep it up!

A very intriguing and unique perspective. I can recall quite well the cynicism I had playing the Endar Spire after about the third time. Your stark and active language is fitting for your sardonic point of view. Many people might not like your cynicism but I find your sarcastic writing quite refreshing and humorous. Keep writing!