I realize that this review is almost a year late, but when I read a story that that I know is something special, I have to say something.

I was blown away by this story. There aren't enough stories about Eddie to begin with, and to see that someone has actually gotten into his head and written him in such a sympathetic and realistic way is amazing-- even more amazing when I realize you're not a big fan of him in the first place. In my opinion, you brought home the reason for Eddie's eventual psychosis in one simple, memorable sentence: "For a moment, Eddie had been god." I didn't think it was possible to feel sorry for a character while still feeling repulsed by his actions, but you have pulled it off quite nicely. Outstanding work.

The only nitpicks I can see are the spelling errors (but you probably already knew that, judging from your profile), and sometimes the sentences seemed to be run-ons. Although if you were attempting to show Eddie's frantic thought processes, then it works. And speaking as someone who likes to write dialogue more than prose, your dialogue is realistic and wonderful to read.

Maybe, now that a year has passed, you don't hold this story in high regard anymore. Maybe enough time has passed where you're ashamed to get a review like this, but I honestly enjoyed this story very much, and wanted to thank you for sharing it.

Um, that was a bit better than 'somewhat amusing'. Your description of Eddie's state of mind was perfect, and the build-up was written so intensely realistically that you could imagine something like this happening in Anytown, USA (which it does, sadly - and on that note, I love how easily Eddie could buy the gun). Also, nice to see that Eddie didn't turn into the average Bloodthirsty Maniac Pushed Over The Edge By Society. Instead he was still just a panicky young man, shocked at what he'd turned out to be capable of doing. In terms of CC, you could cut down on the metaphors for hatred - fire, acid and whatnot. Maybe it's just me, but it comes off too ... theatrical. Also, there's a few spelling mistakes, not much really (though "violent furry" did get a chuckle out of me). To sum up, this was a wonderful portrayal of a wonderful character, with an even more disturbing portrayal of the society in which he grew up.

Wow... Now I remember why I put you on my list of favorites. You really fleshed out Eddie and his psychosis, and you narrated his thoughts and feelings throughout the whole ordeal with incredible aptitude and finesse.

I also enjoyed a number of the little tidbits you included. The reference to the LP player, observation of the fact that the name Dombrowski is Polish in origin, and the sound of the siren at the end to name a few, and I especially like the ambiguity of whether that last one was Silent Hill calling for him or just the authorities rushing to the site of the incident. Whether that was intentional or coincidental, I find that made it all the better, and was a thoroughly brilliant way to leave this bit of work off.