good writing... :)
update :)

Wow. You've got an intense, engaging style of writing. Is Roseberg hiding her box in Partridge's chapel? Looking forward to future installments.

Really good. I can't wait for the rest!

Bowie rocks. Peace out. ^_^v

Interesting beginning! Your descriptions are very vivid. You make your readers experience everything your characters are going through. Keep it up!

Nice way of describing the Gunkata in a fight. I look forward to more of the story. :)

hey!! great beginning, keep on the good work!!