Awesome... sad, but awesome.

A very nicely cadenced, cleverly structured, tragic little piece - I remember it from before.

Very well written. I like the way you used the colors in your story. It made it better. Keep smiling. :-)

That was great!

Very clever!

After reading the opening line of each section I dreaded what horrible event it was hinting at.

This was haunting (the way that you repeated "if such a thing could be said" after a new opening description in particular) and well done.

a lovely, haunting ficlet.

Wow! Well done! Brilliant execution of this short story. I loved your use of color as a symbol for each emotional event - almost a poem. It was indeed very sad but worth saying.

Neat and orginal - I read this in a rush and have to rush out the door or I'd leave a longer review. In one word - Excellent!

Congrats,
HulaHula

Interesting way of organizing a series of the character's thoughts, musings, whatever. Sorry, don't quite know what to call it, but I did like it. Well written. Hope more people get to read it. I found it on Whitehound's site.

*The title comes from a fanfiction I read once, it was the title of a subchapter. Unfortunatly, I have no idea who or what story it came from, if some were to tell me, I would gladlygive them credit.*

Credit T.S. Eliot—it's taken from the last lines of Little Gidding. :)

"Quick now, here, now, always—
A condition of complete simplicity
(Costing not less than everything)
And all shall be well and
All manner of things shall be well
When the tongues of flame are in-folded
Into the crowned knot of fire
And the fire and the rose are one."

Just to say—the title is attractive because it comes from that poem (makes me want to know more!), but the incorrect capitalization and spelling are, on the other hand, off-putting. It should read "Costing Not Less than Everything."

And like a drumbeat, the terrible, painful refrain. The world was too bleak, if such a thing could be said. It was a Sunday..