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| Umi Pryde 2008-02-28 ch 1,  | abuseI enjoyed the Evelyn point of view. Really an interesting take, except I'm not sure making Angel have a middle name works - most men wouldn't go by Angel if their middle name was Kevin - they just wouldn't. (just me, my father goes by his middle name for a simular reason) As for Jack having a sister and being from Norway. Interesting - but I would think a trained and seasoned social worker would be able to put 2 and 2 together and figure out that they have the same last name, she has a younger brother - and Oh, the files did come togehter, perhaps they are related. It would be more believable if something happened to the sister - say suicide or something to which Jack was left alone. |
| Rogue21493 2006-10-21 ch 1, | abuseI liked it. Please add more chapters. I want to know what happens. Thanks. |
| Ghostwriter 2006-04-18 ch 1, | abuseCute. Catch ya on the flip side. |
| Artemisnefer 2006-04-05 ch 1, | abuseThis is really interesting. Add more chapters please? |
| silenceinlight 2006-04-05 ch 1, | abuseI'm a bit confused as to how Evelyn could have missed Karmen being Jack's sister when they share the same last name. That and why would the Norwegian government send children to the United States? It seems a bit unrealistic. Other than that this seems interesting and the backgrounds for the other brothers is very realistic. |
| ImAdctd2A3rdClssRkStr 2006-04-05 ch 1, | abuseADD MORE CHAPTERS! This is really good! Thank you so much for reviewing my story! I looked in your profile and I saw this story... fantastic job! I'm sorry this was so short... I just wanted to tell you that this was great! ~/Addy/~ |
| pwrhungryjr 2006-04-05 ch 1, | abuseWait...is Jack Norweigan in this story? Thats certainly different! Bravo for creativity! |
| XxCrash.And.BurnXx 2006-04-05 ch 1, | abusecan u add more chapters please? and if you want me to keep reading you'll add in a character named Camryn for Jack to hang out with and maybe eventually GO out with... please! anyway luv how u started it! please add a camryn in there for me and i'll DEFINATELY keep reviewing and reading... i know its a bribe but o well!! *Cam*(Lysa) |
| Snowgurl54 2006-04-05 ch 1, | abusegreat! |
| Bigamericanflirt 2006-04-04 ch 1, | abusewow thats really good!! very original! i like it! update soon! |
| pee wee16 2006-04-04 ch 1, | abusethis story seems really good so far |