 phoebe 2006-04-26 . chapter 1 First, that was an interesting idea. I had the feeling that the idea could have been explored more thoroughly though. Lindsay could have done things differently, seeing that she knows the procedures of handling a case, she could have gotten hers investigated by the O.S.I.R.
Second, I find the ending a little too convenient? It would have fitted better if your story was a comedy.
Third, don't take this review too seriously. Overall, you did a good job. It's nice to know that there are such things as happy endings. :) |