wait... arata? soujirou? fake name i guess... ^.^ pretty good fic! i hope there's some action soon!

*~tsukiko~*

Well, I must say I like what I see so far. Soujiro a drunk? I would have never thought of that in a thousands years. Nevertheless, I'm still interested. In my opinion I think fanfiction is a great opportunity to experiment with characters in different scenarios.

You're very descriptive. It is nice. But there's one thing I'd like to point out to you. I know I'm going to be the biggest hypocrite in the world when I say this, but sometimes the detailed descriptions are a little unnecessary. I think it's great for setting up a scene, or explaining a characters thoughts and feelings, but every action does not need to be explained down to the smallest detail. I have the same problem, because it's fun to describe things! It's just not always fun to read.

Unfortunately, I only have time to read the first chapter, so what I'm saying now might not be necessary at all. Forgive me if that's the case. I will continue reading soon!

guard eh?

interesting so far :]

I've never submitted a review for your story, but, I have been reading it ever since it started, even when I didn't have an account. I absolutely love the story, keep up the good work and don't stop writing. I was constantly wondering wether or not you would continue the story on your break between the 12th and 13 chpter.

I can't believe I missed this update for about a month. Shows you where my head's been (not on this planet). Lovely as always, the suspense is building and I enjoyed the Misao/Soujiro interaction (for the brief moment he was actually awake). Have a happy February!

ok ok ok. i'm LATE. late late late. i'm sorry. school is taking over my life! and I'm being plagued with a general lack of interest in RK . It goes through cycles.
That being said (and my excuses made), this was good, as always. Other than a slight grammatical error or typo here and there, I couldn't tell it was unbeta-ed. how would one spell that...?
The ear thing threw me off for a second. I was having Harry Potter flashbacks haha. That scene, though, was particularly poignant--Megumi being at such a loss, Kenshin unable to bear such injuries on a friend of his, etc...
I'm missing the Soujiro/Misao interaction! Five paragraphs! They were excellent, but I want more! Still, I liked her cleaning and his waking. He seemed slightly more like himself, a little less crazy.
And now that I've written a whole novella here, I'll just sum it all up bu saying that I still enjoy this and I'm glad you updated!
Now if only I could motivate myself to do the same...

Description of Sano and, more importantly, the reaction of Kenshin, was very good, IMO. Glad to see this updated.

hello, i'm still eagerly waiting for an update! just wanted to let you know.

*breathes a huges sigh of relief*

I've reviewed 'Shotgun Wedding' before, and you've replied to it via email (... I think.) I'm thrilled that I FINALLY got to the latest chapter of this one.

In so saying, please don't take offence on me as I say these things:

* Your chapters are way too descriptive. While I know your intent was to actually bring out more of the environment, situation, feelings unexpressed, etc, etc. at some point, it gets a bit tiring to read. To be honest I only persisted because I love SouMi. I love your plotline, your dialogue / conversations, but the descriptions don't really sweep me off my feet in wonder / awe / amazement but leaves me torn if I'll go to the next chapter or resume it for another day, when I have more time and more patience.

* I'm finding it hard to understand the thing going on between the two warring clans. But then again, maybe I'm just too jumpy and excited that I actually read too much into your descriptions and thought something was already going on when you haven't really discussed it yet. *is shot for being an eager-beaver*

* Grammatical errors here and there. English is not my native language, I'm not a perfect speaker, nor am I an English / Literature / Creative Writing Professor (darn I'm just a bum! Makes me feel so incompetent to even be saying these to you~), but I am bothered by these. When I write, I try my best to review and re-work everything before getting ahead of myself and posting it (I have no beta. haha.). I'm not saying what I do is the right way to go; only, it would save you the wait for your beta's go-signal if it'd take EONS for the beta to check his / her mail.


An unsolicited advice, if you may (and shoot me for it if you feel offended): after finishing up a chapter / story / whatever, save and leave your work for a while and drink, or eat, see a movie or play videogames if you feel inclined to do so -- just get your mind off the mood, then after a few days (or hours) open it; read it again. You'll see the mistakes you have made, and you'll be able to correct them.

... Or, if you really don't feel like letting your chapter sit in your docs for a few days, try grabbing a bite to eat, or drink, then after a few minutes go back, change the font face (and make it bigger) then start beta-ing it on your own. xDD

With the descriptions I have no idea how to remedy it effectively. Especially from someone who is too wordy for her own good. lol. You could always state it directly, rather than try and be descriptive all the time. It breaks the pattern. ^0^


Again this is not meant to offend you; I still remember the fact that you like constructive crits better than 'ooh-great-nice-insertwhateverpositiveadjectiveyoucanthinkofhere-story/chapter' reviews. This doesn't remove you from my favourite authors list! I still like how you are able to come up with fresh ideas *bangs her head on the keyboard because her muse died and left her*. I only say these things because I felt as a reader it is my duty to tell you which points can be improved.

And this is in NO WAY an attempt for you to improve your stuff to get more reviews, but to improve it to make you a far better writer than you are now. (Doesn't mean you're a bad writer!) I stand by my opinion that quality is still to be chosen over quanitity. *grins*

Again I'm sorry if there were a lot of things I said; I just felt the need to say these things rather than just wait for your next update. They are in no way intended to make you feel bad. 0=D


~Orenji-onna

Interesting...heh, now all we need is for Saito to show up.

Wow, you are on fire! Go mr./ms. muse go! I wish mine would come back from vacation.

nice. i'm interested in reading more about this Daisuke character. it's very nice that you're setting up the situation rather than jumping into immediate action.

well i dont really have anything to say that i haven't already haha. still, just wanted to tell you again how lovely your writing is :)

I come back from my brief vacation from fanfiction and I find not one but TWO chapters. It most certainly made my day! I'm glad your muse has returned. I think I remember you were looking for new Soumi works or at least were at some point- I have a small series of poems and drabbles I may post up soon (if I decide they arent too awful.) I'll keep you posted.