I enjoyed this a great deal. Great plot. Perfect flow. Over all just a wonderful read. You did an excellent job. and the translation didn't hurt it at all. Great job.

Definitely the best fic about Zak I've read. He's perfectly in character. And he's not the only perfect character here. All the drows are exceptionally well portrayed. You made a great work and I also want to compliment with you for the translation, which is very good in my opinion.
Thanks for the effort! =)

It's really neat to see a story in which Nalfein is alive and has an active part in the story. Little is known about his character because he dies so early in Homeland, but I think hte way you portrayed him is just how he might have been, never one to make any trouble, yet finding himself on the recieving end of his brother's insane risk taking. How very typical of a drow to set someone up in such a way that he is almost sure to be killed, and then just laugh it off and think only of his own sucess. I liked the charater of the matron mother as well. You gave her this very frightening rage, nad way of venting her anger, that somehow made me think, "Woah... and I thought I had a disfuntional family." She never got THAT mad in the books... but then again, no one ever had the nerve to try such a daring stunt like that against her in the books either. good idea you had with that plan. What better way to aggravate a drow high preistess, than to distroy her whip.
I would love to read some more little pieces about life in the Do'urden household. I Think those would have some good potential. Also, very cool that you translated this story form another languge. Your english is very good.
If I may, i would like to offer a little information though. Maya is known to be younger than Dinin. Therefore she could have been more than a young child, if she was even born at all, at the time that Dinin would still have had a wooden training weapon. This mix up of detalils does nopthing to take away for the story though so it's no huge deal. i just thought I would point it out. Keep up the greast writing.

Short to the point. Didn't add useless dripple. Nice fight secene even tho I doubt Dinin would actually perform that well at this stage if ever against Zak. Loved it. Wouldn't mind seeing more scenes from home like this one.

Loved it, you hear? Loved it!
Wonderfully in character, especially Dinin.

Well written, and you kept everyone very well in character. Good job.

Wow, cool story. Quite in-character, I think, though I doubt that Dinin could have dodged Zaknafein's attacks. But I liked that too for Dinin was my favourite in the books and I didn't like angsty Zaknafein. I wish I could find more stories like this.

Yes, that's Dinin:) Quite the little bastard.
Liked that depiction of the Do'Urden household very much.
And Zaknafein's anger and resignation at his deed goes very well with what is described in the books.
Thank you fro writing it.