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kindapsycho89 2007-05-02 ch 5,	abuseI can't even read this any more. Envy is so ooc. Its kind of weird. No offense. But, I think you might have potentioal. Maybe.
kindapsycho89 2007-03-01 ch 4,	abuseHot chocolate. In the movie 'Chocolate' when the girl finally figures out his favorite chocolate it is by accedient and it turns out to be Hot Chocolate. Now I don't know if thats where your going with this but I just thought I'd tell you that little tid bit. Oh and by the way this ooc Envy is a little annoying. I mean it is one thing to have him scare easily but these random Wrath beatings just keep getting more out of place, not to menchon that you keep making Envy sound stupid. I am sorry if these coments offend you but I think constuctive critassim helps a lot more than lying. I'm done for tonight so I'll read more next time I'm on.
kindapsycho89 2007-03-01 ch 3,	abusei noticed a part in your story that reminded me of the movie 'Chocolate'. "Oh and what's that trick?" Envy asked. Anger leaned closer to Envy, they were still a foot apart but she could whisper to him. "I have the ability to guess peoples favorite chocolates" she whispered. yeah thats a cool movie. Envy is really ooc. Anger seems ok though. Still think you r making Envy look ridiculaus (or like a wuss).
kindapsycho89 2007-03-01 ch 2,	abuseokay so u r going 4 a wuss envy, your proagotive i guess. but dose he really have to be so stupid. Im not trying to be mean but well its not a very real portrail of him. And the random beatings of wrath come at odd moments. sorry if u think this isn't a nice comment but i just want to help out. again sorry if u take this bad.
kindapsycho89 2007-03-01 ch 1,	abuseim new to fanfic so i was worried about leaving a review. But i have a question why would envey get scared over just 2 words. Not that im juddging or any thing. I guess il just read the rest and see if u made him a wuss threw the whole thing. Cause I dont really see how a self pro claimed fan girl of envys can really make him so lame as to scare over just 2 words.
ShadowsDarkTidings 2006-11-06 ch 18,	abuseI noticed the shortened amount of reviews so i decided to get outta my shell and Review. Its very good and intersting story and i'm very anxious to read the next chapter. Update it soon so i can read some more please.
TyrantFlame 2006-07-13 ch 16,	abuseWhoa... who's mystery silver-chick?? hm... this is getting even MORE interesting. ^^ Write more!!
TyrantFlame 2006-06-25 ch 15,	abuse..Not a very good sport, is she?? Ah well. Your story. I'll just have to wait and see. nice chap and... Envy's so funny here!! Who woulda guessed that he'd actually turn himself into a palm tree?? ^_^ Waiting for next chap!
TyrantFlame 2006-06-09 ch 14,	abuseHide and seek? WOOT! I love the idea!! Go with it!! ^_^ The cave thing was kinda confusing, but fun, nonethless! ^_^ I knida wished i knew what was in there... Just get on with the hide and seek thing! =^^=
TyrantFlame 2006-05-26 ch 12,	abuse...O.O;; SCARY! (hides) this is the scariest chapter so far! Dun let her get me! Lol. okay, i lied. I love this chap. ^_^ Envy was particularly straightforward, which made him really adorable and imagining Takie and Greed get thrown out was simply hillarious. (Hey, at least you didn't leave a scratch on him! ^_^) I'm just wondering what the cave has in store for Envy...
Ashyx 2006-05-12 ch 4,	abuseyep, i really like the story ^^ it's really cool.
Ashyx 2006-05-11 ch 3,	abusehave you seen the movie chocolat? it's kind of like your story^^
TyrantFlame 2006-05-07 ch 11,	abuse(blink, blink) O_O;; Scary... Oh PLEASE! Dun leave another scar on Greed! It's so unladylike. (skittles away) Anger: (glares at me) I didn't mean it.. O.O;; (BOOM!) ...(signboard): Shoot... Signboard: CONTINUE!
TyrantFlame 2006-04-26 ch 10,	abuseI wonder what they've got in mind... (looks at Takie and Greed) THEY WERE SO CUTE IN THIS CHAP! ^_^ But, ow... that has GOT to hurt... Anger really knows how to hurt someone. Let's just hope Greed's face doesn't blow up again. Or at least, not his HEAD!
Hyrulian Hero Akai 2006-04-25 ch 9,	abuseheh, interesting. tho i wonder do u know the name of the symbol on a homunculus? from what i understand its called the Orourobourus symbol. erm...not sure if thats spelled right or not...well anyways i cant wait for the next chap.

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