This was pretty good, Rimera. Shame you never continued it.

I really enjoy this story. Please finish! I miss Lunch. She was so kick butt.

Interesting story. and I really like Lien. :)

Hmm. Hmm. Hm...

I like it.

Lien's personality is charming, and the fact that she has anger problems (and a potential evil side) makes her a balanced enough character for me.(Stamps Lien with "Not-A-Mary-Sue" stamp)

I've watched DB and DBZ since I was three, and I always hated the fact that Lunch just disappeared from the series, only to make cameos every hundred episodes, or so. Come on! Who doesn't love the blonde, gun-toting side of Miss Lunch? Not me, that's who! That alone made this pleasurable for me to read.

As long as Lien doesn't have some every single hot male character fall in love with her at first sight, and as long as she doesn't turn 100% angsty...she won't get my evil "MARY-SUE! CHARACTER MUST DIE!" stamp.

I'm glad people are reading my rants. That makes me feel loved. (grins)

And...I'd love to join the Bloodthirsty Squirrelly-Squirrel Club! I'll even bring BSS along during club meetings! (Pats BSS on head as he eyes Jiro hungrily)

Later!

a date? i knew it! wonder if Lunch did sneeze. i read and reviewed, now u have to up-date! plz plz pretty plz? Lien and Goten. they might make a good couple.

shes gonna meet her dad, isnt she? wot! why didnt he come back to Launch and Lien, anyway?

since there are two chapters ahead of this review, ppl have probably already offered ideas for what Lien could do for Goten. but ill offer mine anyway: um... she could set him up with a chick he likes? i really dont know lol. heh heh. good chapter. cant wait until Lien learns to use her powers more!

you story sits way back in the archive of fics unless u update, and i never go too many pages into the collection because fics in the back havent been updated for ages... abandoned and whatnot... so i kinda forgot about this one. it's been ages since i read and reviewed, but its still a good story. :) gah, she's got powers and she hasnt been raised with knowledge about them? :'(
keep writing! (plz) :D

Keep the chapters comming ;) I wonder where Lunch is..?

Bloody Kisses

Heyya!

Your story is great! I just love the way the character is linked to the Z team. I think they may be sparkle between her and Gotten. I hope the next chapter is comming soon!

By the way, the dialogues between Chi-Chi and Goku are funny.

Tourlou & kisses

This is so good. You write almost as well as my sister. Just kidding! About any negative insinuations, that is. Anyhoo, this is really good. Keep it up.

I really cannot adequately express how much I love that conversation between Goku and Chi-Chi at the start of this chapter. I could just see it happening, complete with confused facial expressions. Much love!

I haven't commented on previous chapters, but I just wanted to tell you how much I've enjoyed reading this so far. It's great to read a story by a good writer who can maintain a consistent voice for her character. I also appreciated the little clues you dropped in earlier chapters that allowed me to guess what was going on.

*checks story alert box*

Well, they could always go out on a date...as payment for the mob thing, of course. Or, she could help him train some more. Or, of course, she could always help him get OUT of a scrape with a girl... Just an idea. Anyway, I like the story. And no, it's not just because I love you. Which I do. ANYWAY, I suppose it's my place to tell you that you should update soon. When you have time, between work and classes.

I love the comentary between goku and chichi at the top of this chapter...you really kept Goku in character. I like the over all story and the twist about who Lien really is. I don't usually like made up characters, but those two should of had a kid! >=0 Great story! I loved it! (is it over now or are you still planning to work on it?)

omg dis is such a gd fic! by da way how da hell do u publish these stories cos i've got a gd fic coming along