n_n Great job with this fic so far. Your English is excellent (I adore your metaphors). I really liked the way you handled the end of this chapter with Kakashi.

This story is so intriguing; I can't wait for the next update.

Oh!! So great!! Please write more?? And that girl.. It wouldn't be that she has a scar over her nose would it?? And she wouldn't happen to not be a girl would it?? I just wondered.. If there were the slightest chance that She might was named umino iruka?? Please let me know.. Also.. Hurry up making the next chapter please?

Hugs from Hanami

Very interesting fic you've got going here. There are some errors throughout the fic, but for the most part they're small ones, or ones that a beta could catch very easily. (Can't remember if you have one or not.) I really would like to see where this goes and I hope you update it sometime in the near future. I'm in a hurry at the moment or I would offer a more detailed opinion, but nice work!

>.< i think i'm confused aahahahha when am i not
chapter is aweosme, i'll be waiting for more

I only just discovered this story and read it strait through in one sitting, it's such a wonderful concept. You're watching these two lives run parallel to each other and waiting for the moments when they will intersect. It's interesting to have a kaka/iru story where they really haven't spent much time together yet they are each in their own way trying to figure out what their relationship is to each other.

There is one thing I would like to point out and that's you said Iruka had to go for reeducation I think the word you meant was rehabilitation, if your talking about the extercises you have to do to rebuild your strength after an injury.

Other than that the story is well done, especially since you don't speak english as a first language. I will definitely be waiting for an update, I can't wait to see how you bring their relationship along.

over already...dang =(

I just started reading this again (I was in Japan for a month!). nice image with the festival. I loved that.

Oh for your reference, we don't really use "much" for people. We mainly use "many." So it's "so many people" not "so much people."

And now, to continue reading.

Yay an update!! It's been a while so I don't remember much, just something along the lines of Iruka, bad mission, hospital, Kakashi and nothing more. So, I can't write a proper review... Anyway, great chapter. You manage to convey a feeling of...of tiredness (I don't know how to put it) The best part was:

"In a way, he was glad Naruto was not around [...] Iruka wanted to be strong for Naruto, to be a steady part of his life, much like a father or a older brother should be. He did not wish the boy to see him in such a state."

That was an incredible good description of Iruka's personality, IMO.
I want to read more ^^
N.

this is very intriguing, I hope you continue

I left a review for you at LJ but wanted to leave one here too. This is a very nice story. You have put a lot into the emotion of the story and it shows. I look forward to the next chapter.

This story really isn't like any of the others that I have read, it's slower and contempletive (is that even a word?). But I have to say that I really enjoy the way that you weave so much emotion into the story and that it is so solid and believeable. I do have to ask though, are ever going to explain that mystery jutsu or do I just need to buy and extra helping of patience next time I'm at the personality-mart?

can't wiat for the next chapter

Yeah, I agree the crazy-jounin theory is mostly fanon. But it makes sense all the same.

This story just keeps getting better and better. ^^ Please continue!

-MeeLee

aw poor kakashi

Wow both your story and your English are really good. I've been taking French for nearly five years now and there is no way that I could write a whole story in French. Donc felicitations!