Wow, very nice writing!
You've really captured Jess and how deep he is behind his facade and you've done a great job writing how he might be when he's old.
Very nice writing, this could work even if it wasn't a fanfiction, beacuse it's such a wonderfully written story.

Great job! Keep on writing!

AWWE! That was the sadest thing ever! I loved it so much. It was amazing! Love it,

This had me in tears...it really did..i mean it was so beautiful.

oh wow, there´s nothing much i have to say. this is simply perfect!

“And the third—and this is the most important—is that you have to let that person know that you can’t bear to be without them. You can’t build walls around yourself and shut everyone else out. You can’t pretend that your emotions aren’t there, because they are. You can’t get hurt once and decide not to love anyone ever again, because if you do, your live will be seriously ** up.”

You made me cry so bad -- and it's only 8:30 in the morning. You captured grown-up Jess so perfectly -- and through the eyes of his child -- I have no words. No words. This is beautiful, and heartbreaking.

wow. really just wow. amazing short. I really like how it work's without even necessarily being a "fanfiction" either. very deep and insightful writing.

This is beautiful. And, by some stroke of chance (luck), I'm listening to Ben Folds' song "The Luckiest" right now, and it's all combining to leave me in tears.

"He only wrote one word: luck.

Before he died, he’d said that he wanted to leave me his luck. Because after everything he’d been through in his life, the pain of his childhood and the torment of his cancer, he truly believed he was lucky."

That is the most quintessentially Jess way of saying "I love you" that I've ever seen.