you should keep going with the story

lol, i chocked on my drink when i read that last line! hehe i can tell that it wasn't meant to be funny, but hell, i thought it was! cant wait for the next chappie, keep it up.

Just gotta mention, Grissom seemed a little too impassionate about the news of his sister dying. He kinda just asked, What am I getting? Like it happened to him every day. Not like I expected him to blubber over it, but still... Some emotion. But eh, you're story.

Fast update, nice chapter. Keep that up and you'll be set for it. Later.

Peace out, one love,
MC New York

Wh...What is it...waiting for more

WTF? That's slightly creepy but a good start. Seriously. I can't wait to see how this unfolds. Keep it up!

Later,
MC New York

ooh... *quivers in boots*
this has potential to be a really good, scary story!