Well, it was certainly a well-written and interesting read, but I guess I just don't appreciate the art of writing enough because I didn't analyze it, I just read the story. Excellent description, fine details and tension, but I didn't notice the techniques explained in the notes, so I'm not the ideal audience apparently. :)

-Reklar

I liked the italic style that you wrote this in. I figured that the italicized parts were flashbacks of Whirlwind himself, and liked how it turned out to be different then what I thought.

I "got it" with the use of the italics. Although I was expecting a comedy from your forum posts! This is an interesting view of Black Whirlwind's history. To take a basically comedic (if darkly comedic) character like BW and emphasize the darker parts of his background is always intriguing. Good technique, good improvisation with the elements you were given.

I guess I'll just have to wait to find out what the story is behind that public defecation charge! ;)