Reviews for What a Wonderful World

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Rinne 2008-06-16 ch 9,	abuseThis has got the makings of a great story, and your overall story telling is pretty good, but I've had to give up at this point, because there's plot details that just don't make sense in terms of a story set in the law enforcement world. Don's just caught the guy after he's killed Bradley's family act and started running after him. I don't understand why Don doesn't shoot him shoot him, which seems the more logical course of action considering how far away Don is and how dangerous this bloke is, instead of letting him get away. It seemed to me that it took way too long for them to notice the pattern of them all being attacked at 7 am. Wouldn't Megan or Don have called the police/FBI for back up at Charlie's house, once he'd been threatened after the guy attacked Don? It's quite possible that someone could have taken less than 15 minutes to get there. They knew that the attacker was possibly targeting Don ("I didn't know that you had a younger brother") -- it doesn't make sense to me that none of the family had protection of any sort. Keep writing, you definitely have the makings of a great author, particularly considering how young you are. From your writing, I wouldn't have picked you to still be in high school -- your writing reads at a much higher level than that.
Gonzo 2008-02-27 ch 5, anon.	abuseAnother stellar chapter, my good fellow ;)love the Don and Charlie action as always, a constant reminder of what the show is missing 95% of the time :P the description of their attacks and subsequent injuries continue to make me grimace in sympathy, you make it easy to picture... and what better way to end it than shock and concern from our friendly neighbourhood Jewish father? ;) curious about the whispering voices... looking forward to more suspense :D
DawningStar 2007-10-30 ch 14,	abuseYour punctuation is a little idiosyncratic and the run-on sentences tend to confuse me, so it took me a while to get into the story. But your plot's good enough to make up for it--nice job overall, a fun read. And Alan got to be a hero! That doesn't happen often enough. grins
Gonzo 2007-06-21 ch 4, anon.	abuseOk, now you got my attention :P ...yet another great chapter, did not see that twist coming :) can't wait to read more!!
An-Jelly-Ca 2007-05-26 ch 1,	abuseo.O I like it!
thebondgirl 2007-05-08 ch 3,	abuseAlways love your attention to detail, makes everything feel so real! Great build-up on the case, and the drama between the characters, can't wait to read what happens next (most specifically, what happens to Charlie...hehe - what can I say, I love the little genius and you write him so well :D ) Gonzo
Freakk66 2007-04-03 ch 14,	abusegreat story!! i really liked it!! ^_^
wraiths-angel 2007-04-02 ch 14,	abuseaww, liked the stoery i enjoyed reading it and the ending sweet, sorry it took me so long to review but been busy, and for some reason this story never came up on my email but i found it again hehe, looking forward to further stories you are going to make!
bree1387 2007-04-02 ch 14,	abuseGreat story, very detailed. And one can never go wrong with lots of Charlie whump! Your spelling/punctuation is very good, but two typos stood out in this chapter: conger = conjure, and conformation = confirmation. Conger took me a while to decipher. ;) I'm looking forward to your other stories!
Curtisbrothersfan 2007-04-01 ch 14,	abuseNo one had expected her to pull through. Six hours later, something happened. A sudden pounding in her chest. A sudden warmth spread throught out her body. She was no longer cold, lifeless. A pulse beat steadily inside her. She was alive. However, she had not expected to wake to such horrifying news. She loved it, read it over several times. It was so glorious... until the last two words that cut through her, making her almost wish she was back in the darkness. The end. How could it be? Her beloved Don had watched her equally-beloved Charlie die. There was no way he could be unaffected by that. Knowing that was true, and that Charlie would surely be traumatized as well, she held onto the hope that there would be a sequel. Afterall, a story as wonderful as this one couldn't be over, never truly. Then, as though the lightbulb went on over her head, Meghan realized that thebondgirl had let her in on a secret. She had told her that there was a new story, one that sounded equally intriguing. Finding it hard to believe she could outdo this story, Meghan wondered if thebondgirl could pull off another great story. Thinking back on "When The World Stops Turning," Meghan realized that, yes, thebondgirl could outdo herself. With a smile, Meghan stood from the hospital bed. She would be fine because thebondgirl would have yet another great story... one that she would eagerly await in good health.
PrInCeSsFBi 2007-03-30 ch 6, anon.	abuseNO CHARLIE DON SAVE HIM DAMN THIS IS REALLY GOOD WHAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN DA DON DA
PrInCeSsFBi 2007-03-30 ch 2, anon.	abuseOK im liking the story but i think there should be a little more charlie pov
Leoloco 2007-03-30 ch 12,	abuse(consider this a review for ch 14 which for some reason isnt available once again) Pff! Good to know that Charlie isnt that dead after all (I really love the fiction in fanfiction, dont you?) I liked the chapter, and the story as a whole. I hope you're planning to write (even) more.
Jamiie numb3rs 2007-03-29 ch 14,	abuseAw... the ending, so touching. Really. I've never really experienced reading a story that was so emotional, I cried. :D Great Story!! I Love your work! you're now one of my favorite authors. ;)
cole 2007-03-28 ch 14, anon.	abuseAwesome ending. I can't wait to see your upcoming works!

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