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| Lord's Girl Forever 2008-02-16 ch 1,  | abuseI'm retty sure that "Toa-sister' is a Le-Matoran thing, not all Toa, but the story was still nice. Short and sweet. |
| Flames Chaos and Wolf 2006-06-01 ch 1, | abusegOOD. |
| Saya Moonshadow 2006-05-29 ch 1, | abuseAw... =) |
| Unlucky Seven 2006-04-15 ch 1, | abuseI like this fic, it is sweet and simple and I agreed in Whale Shark 7's opinion, them kissing is pretty cliche or rushed. In short you did a good job. |
| Bioniclefangirl 2006-04-15 ch 1, | abuseAw...cute they are a nice couple =1 |
| Whale Shark 7 2006-04-14 ch 1, | abuse"Gali looked up. The glow from the fireworks made it difficult to see, but there was no mistaking the tall figure in front of her." I like that mental image. I liked that you didn't use too many adjectives like what usually happens in romance fics (i.e., "the ruggedly tall, dark and handsome...dude" *snorts* Okay, we get the picture! XD). "Hello Tahu." she said patting the seat next to her, inviting him over. He sat down, his legs crossed under him. Gali had let her's hang precariously over the edge. "Be careful Toa-sister. none of us want you to fall off." I liked that part. I would have preferred if everyone hadn't noticed their embrace. However, I really liked that Gali and Tahu didn't kiss in this fic. It's kind of become a cliche in romance stories. I think it was more profound because they didn't kiss, and they just hugged instead. Good story. I liked it. =) |