I've just been directed to this piece of yours, and Oh. My. Stars.

This was wonderful!

O-M-G! XD i didnt think she would do that! so funny :) you said that other people where doing novelizations of the story right? i cant seem to find any good ones, do you know of any?

but i was hoping for a confrontation between them ever since i first saw Mirage pop up into the story, and him standing on top of the tower thing looking down at the spaceship. though was kinda hoping he wouldve seen it open up from where he was, rather than 'happened to be passing by...' passing by? its crashed on the northern end of the city, nowhere near any important places. maybe a tavern, i didnt really store it away for future reference. anyway, what a coinkidink Albel XD but again: oh you made me so happy! i gotta fav this!

Hell, that was absolutely brilliant. A pretty original theme, so wonderfully written that my jaw kinda fell off its hinges. The characterization, the scenery descriptions and the fighting scenes (especially the fighting scenes!) were pure genius. I loved how you portrayed both characters, and how you made Mirage look so impossibly cool towards the very end. She easily humiliated her opponent, with both her words and her skills, she beat him to a bloody pulp, and then she even stole his valuables.

On top of that, the extra omake almost killed me. XD

Should I be feeling sorry for Albel...? Nah, he had it coming to him. Although... Mirage's final revenge (I'm still talking about the omake here) was WAY too cruel. XD

There wasn't a single misplaced line in this fic. I loved your witty dialogues and vocabulary. I also liked the switching points of view, since it allowed you to give us a more detailed version of that encounter.

Well, what else can I say? Awesome story, instant fav.

*Mass snickering* This was absolutely great. That Omake was funny, but the rest of the story I loved and it was excellently written.

Oh my god. I hadn't intended to review, but that's the best SO3 fanfic I've ever read, and the best fanfic I've read in a while. It's just hilarious, and the fighting scenes were well done. I don't know too much about Mirage's character yet (I only just reached Sphere), but the characterization seemed well done too. Keep it up!

Really a fun read. I could easily see this happening in the game...(well, if the game designers lightened up a bit more.)

And being more of a fan of Mirage than of Albel, this story gives me a warm little glow in my heart.

...On a completely unrelated note, did you discontinue that Secret of Mana novelization that used to be on your site?

Anyways, I really like your writing style in this one, it seamlessly conveys descriptions, thoughts, actions, and most importantly, that dry humor.

Ohh! Albel and Mirage staory 'not many of those! I love this story- no romance, just buttkicking action and Albel slamming that strangely I don't mind because his reactions are priceless-and I love the fact that Albel tells a soldier not to under-estimate women and then does so himself- giving a demonstration as to what will happen to you if you do! And I love the attitudes and thoughts and the fighting and basically everything! The addition at the end was like getting an unexpected extra present! I love this!

this is one of the better stories I've come across...I like the angle of filling in Albel and Mirage's stories. Good use of humor ("neon sign 'Extremely Dangerous'", "abundance of metal-armed warriors" cracked me up). Albel is, I think, the most fascinating character in the game because he is complicated...good work not making him entirely evil or (worse) stupid and goofy like some other writers do. If you continued this story from the Albel POV, perhaps all the way up to his not-clearly-explained decision to save Fayt & co's asses from the Vendeeni, I'd definitely read it. I like your style!

Holy...this is priceless. Albel getting his ass handed to him by Mirage, and Mirage humiliating him later? Perfect, and the combat was wonderful. Absolutely wonderful. You should write a novelization, because you'd do an excellent job. Portraying the characters and filling the half explanations and details...I think you'd be perfect for the job.

That was so amazing. I wish i could write like that... Well, none of my fics have got to intense fights (yet!) But im sure i couldnt do it that well. Who ARE you in real life? How many books have you published? I swear, this puts some big name authors to shame... I cant wait to see more work.

Ah.

I loved this.

Really like your potrayal of Albel's thought processes. It really fits in with his ingame persona. The part about mirage getting lost in Airyglyph was a nice touch. As was that of the guard that didn't notice her walk by I'm just surprised that Albel didn't gut him for his negligence XD

Mirage lecturing Albel on the proper control of emotions in battle fits her calm demeanor and her training in her Klausian Dojo.

If you proofread our story, I say you did a great job. No mistakes that my poor eyesight could see, a major plus :)

P.S. Oh, only one thing. The cloak that Albel is known to wear is one with feathers lining the collar. The one that is seen on Mirage doesn't have them. Did she pluck them off to spite him :p Just a little FYI on my part.

Oh my goodness!

XDXDXD

Hilarious! I mean the last part. The beginning when he was making fun of Duke Vox rocked too.

O:

This story is very well written, I could even imagine the fighting scenes happening! Maybe they should have let you see that or play that part in the game. It would have rocked. XD

xP

I really really like this story, as I did the Nel one.

If you could ever, update this! Or if this is a one shot, this was really great! I might draw some scenes or parts that you made... Hm... O

The last part was hilarious "He's pretty 'small' you know?" "His bed wetting". I bet that man is so going to tell his friends all this.

XD

I wonder how Albel will explain that away.

Yes, I do think the game left far too many gaps for my tastes.

;_;

You should write a more detailed story! I would read it!

D

Behold! A fic that's actually written well!

Characters were really... in character. ha. Also nicely fleshed out.

Good job, and I'd love to see the story continued. :)

Long... . Still, it was quite interesting. I could totally see Mirage kicking Albel's ass like that. Good job.

First you start with a touch of humor. It was like the appetizer that is followed by a meal - a grand meal at that!

Then you show Albel's intelligent side. The way he taunts Vox but is suspicious of the Eagle. Extremely well done!

Mirage! Yes, next time Cliff will stay behind!

"To worsen matters, she suspected that the individual who designed this city was either a sadistic labyrinth-designer, or completely intoxicated. Or both. Half the corridors and alleyways led to other parts of the city, while the other half were simply inexplicable dead-ends. The rest somehow u-turned and brought her right back to where she'd already been."

XD YES! My thoughts exactly first time through(and it's worse in Radiata Stories if you've never played that game)

You so mix 'gamer's' thoughts in this (ex: Mirage going unnoticed even in her attire) very nicely! I love the though processes of Albel and Mirage. And the scattered humor was magnificent!

"Had he been wearing a neon sign reading 'Extremely Dangerous', it would have been terribly redundant."

XD hehehe

Favorite Line:

Some would say that there was a fine line between brave and insane, but Albel was beginning to suspect that this woman had found an entirely new line, and had crossed it a long time ago.

I wanna be just like Mirage!

GREAT FIGHT SCENE! I had so much fun when I had the two fight but it was nothing like your most awesome work!

Oh...that last part was a teaser. I would LOVE to see this continued. But if not I will lock it safely away in my favorites.