Well its a good and original story, I hope you write more of it. If Akane is not married then she could take an age changing mushroom to become the same age as Ranma. I hope Gos has met with an unkind end. Or is living a long miserable life. Post what you can and if a story dies, then please leave it up and just post the outline in a final chapter. Also please don't ever delete a story. So authors have deleted good but unfinished stories. Thanks for writing.

Frankly speaking, I find this decision distressing. Unless I'm delusional I'm pretty sure this is the second time you've rebooted this fic. Given the slower pace at which you're publishing (for perfectly understandable reasons, of course) I'm worried that this is the start of a death spiral in which you don't ever get to the meat of the story because you keep trying to perfect the beginning. In the meantime people who like the fic are left in the lurch, unable to even get some enjoyment out of rereading what you did write because you keep taking it down.

If anyone has a saved copy of the story, (preferably the version that got to 5. Chapter 4 and Sosuke throwing the flashbang, but I'm not picky) could you please e-mail it to me? My address is in my profile.

Back on track, "Aftermath" is one of the best Ranma/SM crossovers I've read, but the beginning chapter is gods-awful. I'm well aware that it was a design choice, because you'd originally intended it to be a one-off spoof, but when you got to writing a full saga you didn't get bogged down with rewriting the intro, you just trucked ahead to finish the story.

Maybe I'm out of line, since I don't (currently) have any posted fics here, and pulled the one I did for being crap. But the aforementioned death-spiral of inaction is precisely what keeps me from being a writer (fanfic or otherwise), so consider this a cautionary tale. Or just look around the older fics on this site, or any number of hobby sites, comics, stories, etc on the web and you'll find any number of people who burned themselves out trying to retread their early work. Just, please try to focus on moving forward with the story the next time around.

This is getting boring really fast. The concept of the fic was interesting, but now, 4 chapters in, nothing to move the plot along has really happened.

Explaining the nuts and bolts on how to operate a computer or a mobile is pointless. We already know how it works. Reading about it step-by-step will do nothing but bore the reader. It also comes across as kinda patronizing. There are other ways of trying to express Ranma's difficulties with modern technology.

Also, the original Ranma timeline occured sometime during the late 80s or early 90s. Computers wernt unknown then, there were portable music players available, and depending on the locale, mobiles were catching on.

I also couldn't find the point of the pervert children. What was that scene supposed to be for anyway? Breakdown of morals? I cant imagine their parents letting things go that easily. Ranma wouldnt take that kind of talk either, she/he is very sensitive when it comes to his female body.

Finally, where is the FMP element to this? Other than references to arm slaves and the changes in the geopolitics of the world, there really isnt much of a cross to be seen.

Oh man I can't wait to read more finally Ranma is in school and Souske has shown up haha can't wait for you to update this

Hm...

Very intersting fic.

Good writing and an unusual concept but great execution. Keep up the great work.

not bad tri after rereading your revamped version of 4 and this new chapter I can say this is a better story now. also just a question did Ranma just have a close enounter of the Souske Sagara kind?

Sweet another chapter. Wonder how far along the Full Metal Panic timeline is. Can't wait to see how he gets along with the Full Metal Panic crew.

Ha! This story is so awesome! I love the plot you came up with and how you made the characters act older while still being themselves... Just more mature. Lol.

I'll start out by saying that this was very, very well-written. Your style, as far as I can tell, is utterly flawless, and you have a superb grasp of psychology and perspective. It is technically excellent as well, and everybody who is OOC has a good reason to be.

That said, you have a definite writing style that delves more into the psyche, is more dialogue-based, and this story is not my preferred genre. Thus, please recognize that everything that follows is purely a reflection of my opinions and preferences.

Most of this story bored me. Really, it was a hint of action, a spark of comedy, and an ocean of sorrowful conversations, doctor's visits, and pity parties. The vast majority of the fic is spent imploring the reader to feel sorry for Ranma as his actual problems dissolve one by one. And if anything, that's the real problem with this story: a lack of conflict. Thing's aren't exactly hunky-dory, but things aren't happening, and the one thing that DID happen is harshly blunted by the way everybody's perfectly loving and caring and sympathizing, plus all the therapy. Every hint of conflict other than Ranma's inconsistent depression vanishes one by one; the cause of his problem is dead, nobody wants to fight him anymore, his fear of cats is more or less cured, his "locked" curse is unlocked, Ranma comes to accept it, even going so far as to expose and explain it ahead of time to prevent problems, Soun stops wanting to control him, and finally - the REAL kicker - Genma actually decides to try acting like a real parent. Every time even the smallest bit of tension builds, it smoothly bleeds out to nothing as people sit down and talk out their problems like the perfectly rational human beings they never were (it's no wonder Ranma's so confused!). I almost cried in relief when Sousuke threw a grenade in the classroom, so starved was I for anything resembling disorder and uncertainty.

Another problem is that the first three chapters, each of which are of very good length, are just closure. It's said that a good writer can transport the reader into the world they describe, and by that measure you're an excellent writer, because I REALLY felt like I had gone through months of boring therapy and eventually reconciled my immediate past with the future I was suddenly delivered to so that I could finally move on and make my own future and deal with the emotional scars, etc. etc. But you spent more than three chapters getting that across, only so that it could be shoved aside and forgotten as the actual plot finally got on track. That's presuming, of course, that the rest of the story isn't going to be like the first three chapters, but with Sousuke occasionally blowing people up (because then the story's in all kinds of trouble). That's way too long just to establish that Ranma's old life is gone and that he's practically in a new world; your readers figured that out right after Chapter 1 started. I fear for the pace of the rest of the story.

That said, I enjoyed the scenes where Ranma experimented with ki and the scene where he met the Tendo children was easily my favorite. I could see a whole fanfiction series potentially spawning from that one conversation what with all the overlapping personalities and interests in the room, and I would have been truly overjoyed to see that whole cast spontaneously dumped into an arranged marriage sub-plot - or a main plot - and then have it go from there. But, sadly, common sense prevailed somehow, and I have to wonder if those kids will ever appear again, much less be given meaningful roles. Doubtful.

To wrap this up on (hopefully) a more neutral note, I would strongly recommend changing the genre tag on this story to drama.

WTF? Sousuke with the explosives already? Still great ending to an interesting concept.

I am very pleased by the direction you are taking the story in and I am assuming that this chapter is the start of the full metal panic cross over. I am waiting for the next chapter, I know you will not disappoint.

Ah, cliffhangers! I already wanted to read more, though. I loved it when I first read it and was sad it "ended" where it did. I just barely learned that it was still alive and hurried over to read your new chapter.

I want to see what happens next. I'll be watching :)

It's a good start there and 'intro' for the real begin of the story.

I wonder how Ranma will after training much farther with his ki and coming up on the fly with other uses with Ki (I imagine only during the 'stress of battle' XD XD XD ) anyway please continue and I wonder why he didn't know about 'grenades' ?!

While I like the premise of the story, and the writing is good, there are a few criticisms I have. As mentioned by a few other reviewers, the story focuses too much on parts that are largely uninteresting and irrelevant.

Also, I feel that having Ranma and Genma resolve their issues by going to a psychologist or having a group therapy session is really... not realistic. It seems to cheapen the emotional connections of the story. It's like show vs. tell, I feel that it'd be a more interesting story if you let the reader try to figure out Ranma's problems and how he feels instead of him spelling it out to a psychologist.

Finally, while most of your characters seem to be in-character, Genma and Nodoka are grossly distorted. If you're following canon manga version, Genma is nowhere near the chauvinistic male who apparently has issues with his father that you wrote about here. In fact, he only makes those kinds of statements maybe once or twice over the course of the entire manga, and only to taunt Ranma, not in any seriousness. I think Ranma is alot more like Genma, and vice-versa, then you give him credit for.

Nodoka is also nowhere near as understanding and angelic as you wrote her. This is the woman who was perfectly willing to kill her son a few times for not being manly. She is also a total airhead, and very old fashioned. More-so, I would say, than Genma. She IS nice, but I think the fact is that both of Ranma's parents are really screwed up. So is he, kinda.

Despite these however, I think your story is heading in a good and very promising direction, hope to see more from you soon!

great fic!