i diddnt understand a single thing that happeed in that chapter. not very clear, or mabey im just sleepy.

great great story!

"Fine, I hope you like show tunes.

Itachi let out a growl at the pounding headache that ensued."

I literally spit out my tea! Great story.

I loved this bit!

"Uchiha Itachi wouldn’t stand for being raped, and having to feel a female’s pain, no that would have been a little much.

The poor bastards didn’t even know what hit them."

I don't know why, but it amused me to no end... :)

Uchiha Itachi wouldn’t stand for being raped, and having to feel a female’s pain, no that would have been a little much.

The poor bastards didn’t even know what hit them.

I DONT NO WHY, BUT I JUST STARTED TO CRACK UP AT THE END OF THAT PARAGRAPH.!

i love the ITALICS! they were awesome...


love this story ! IMA KEEP GOING!

- (CHOCOLATE HIGH) COUGH COUGH
-apathetic

ah good chap

wo action

lol i like that old man...so mischievous

oh this is very interesting so far!

Just finished this delightful little piece and I must say I absolutely love it.

Your characterization of Sakura has astounded me before in Child's Play and I find it as beautiful here. It's like she's possessed you or something with the way you write her.

Will end it here since if I start I might continue gushing forever about this. Will read Paper Cranes in the morning. I know that wont dissapoint.

Whoa **! this totally reminds me of this movie I watched from before...you know, the person has to track down things with clues before time runs out...that movie or saw, with the whole gore and horror thing. ^^; I seriously love it, you set the mood just right, and can definitely envision the gruesomeness. You should change it from romance/angst to horror/romance. it's very good so far. I love the horror parts in it

omg. I read this while listening to the LOTR soundtrack. You can't even imagine the atmosphere.

beautiful. it made me look at the story with a totally different point of view. I'm amazed.

Now off to the sequel!

I Loved it! What an amazing, well thought out story. I just spent my night reading your entire story! And then I read the two chapters of the sequel! I love it too! This story has become one of my new favorites! Thank you for writing such a great story, I really enjoyed it. I look forward to your updates in 'Paper Cranes' and I can't wait to find out how you will make the story unfold. Good Luck with your writing!

Stephanie :)

OMG!! The 6-5-4-8-9-2-1-0-5 thing was so clever. I was so into reading this that I thought my heart stopped for a second when it was like " she had already wasted 5 mintues." Like he knew she was going to do that! I'm totally amazed at that. SO Clever. You have an amazing writing style.

Stephanie :)