why'd you give shinji the impulse? the X-20A Freedom would have been much cooler

nice touch screwing with the people who made shinji miserable as hell. please update cuz i wanna see what happens next

Just gave this another read, I love this story.

It should be interesting to see what comes next. There will be SEELE to deal with, and the Angels of course. And I'm willing to bet that Asuka isn't done yet, and there has been no reaction from Rei.

Aika as one of Shinji's cousins.
Man, that's really something.
I haven't seen or heard anything of her for a long time.
I only recently find out that there's an anime telling about her when she was sixteen.
It's awesome that she's in this.
And Shiji's other two cousins are pretty cool too.
Ruri and Kamihito.

this is a good story,please keep up the good work and update soon. Thanx

Okay.
I sure didn't see that coming.
Alucard's Shinji's new father.
I never woulda imagined that.
The other relations before were cool surprises, but whoa with this one.
Still, no complaints about it.
I find it one of the most awesome things to happen with Alucard in any universe.
You could also say the same thing with Shinji.

Wow.
And I thought it was something when it was learned that Alucard was Shinji's new father.
Now it's Queen Serenity as his new mother.
Talk about the light being married to the dark.

I really enjoy your work and likr the others I have read by you in the EVA univers this one is just as good. I like the fact that you put all theseother types of Charector from other anime in the story. Me being both a big fan of Tenchi and Ghost in the Shell. I like you you brought into the story.

The only question I have is what anime did the body gaurds come from and also the ship. The only one I found for he ship was something in the Macross universe. Which the ship is real cool looking.

Well update as soon as you can

Sweetie... I don't know what you're smoking, ingesting, soaking in, or what-have-you, but this is some seriously awesome **. ::gigglefits:: Other than that, all I can say is that everyone else has said it first. Why be repetitive? I had fun reading this!

Very good. I like your humor, though I wish you had included Kaji a little bit. Keep going with this story.

Your disclaimer should include Oh! My Goddess.

Well, it is without a doubt an amusing read. Having Belldandy be the one who granted the wish makes this little foray into the greater ani-verse a bit less "buw-wah?" inducing. But only just. The Celestial Guardian thing was an interesting way to get the "everyone's after me" effect going. The family and more you've assembled around him is a bit hard to follow at times. You might want to include a dramatic persona list, with notes, to help with that.

On to some more critical notes. Gendo was portrayed very badly. I don't see him pulling a gun, or physically threatening Shinji. I can see him trying to use those emotional hooks and handles that's he cultivated in Shinji for years to continue the mind ** that is Shinji's life.

Misato would not have forgotten her charges birthday, if for no other reason then keeping his moral up. While she might have been called away to work that day, she would have done something for him. It might have been clumsy and ill thought out, but a gesture would certainly have been made.

Asuka is really getting the short end of the stick as well. She's just as messed up in the head as Shinji is, she just acts out on it in radically different ways. However, her life is tainted by trauma just as much as Shinji's.

Rei, well, she just sat there. While I can see her maybe asking, very calmly, about these people, I can also see her just sitting there and watching.

Touji and Kensuke, wow, harsh. So Misato's a MILF, no need to hate on a couple of red blooded guys for appreciating that. Also, they are pretty loyal to Shinji, and while they have those things that brought them into the friendship, I think it would have grown a bit deeper. Also, Touji should be thanking Shinji for saving his life.

Shinji's found his balls pretty damn quick too. While I can see him gaining a lot of ground, mentally speaking, from a wonderfully disfunctionally functional family being dropped in his lap, this seemed a bit too quick. (Sorry, dad's a vampire, mom's a moon queen, one of his siblings is a shape shifter, another two are magical girls, and the last is a ninja warrior (if memory serves). There is no way it's going to be anything like what you'd classically call a "functional" family. However, sane parenting decisions will probably be made more often then not, and there's love, so it's not like it's a bad family.) Unless that pill also had sanity restoring functions. It's a good source of humor though, so it's not a bad choice.

The super Gundam thing was amusing, but maybe a little overboard (ok, ok, Washu made it, so probably not, but still). I'd go with one control mode over another, and maybe limit Shinji's Mary-Sue level powers while inside it? Maybe?

Shinji has well strayed over into Mary-Sue territory, but if you try hard, he can be dragged back. Kicking and screaming, sure, but it's for his own good. Really, it is. My advise to do so: tone back his powers first and foremost! Less of the wacky ninja BS from Naruto and not nearly as good of control over the Anything-Goes (or work to make some hybrid of the two, that limits the breadth of what he can learn, while making the techniques he can use more effective or zany). Don't slap on an Aura of Smooth. Shinji's already way to close to this, if he hasn't already crossed that line. Tone it down some. This still has to be Shinji. Play more with the transformation of whimp to competent. Don't make the Gundam thing the end-all, be-all. The Guyver Beam cannon thing was just too much. The Sailor Scouts as body guards? Poor Serena, being stripped of her friends and court like that. A little more respect for the source relationships if you're going to use multiple characters like this. Finally, the bad guys need to get more powerful. Much more powerful. Otherwise, there's no sense of drama. No idea that the good guys might not win.

Also, I'd change the tag to include humor, and play that off a bit more. The situation you've created, and the way it's playing out, lend itself far more to that idea. Maybe family/humor or action/humor.

Not a bad yarn over all, but it's falling into some of the classic Eva pitfalls. I think it could avoid them, and the story might very well be served well to do so. Or, make it a comedy, and do running jumps into the pitfalls and play them the hell up. One way or another would be my final note of advise.

This Yakuza sez: Interesting and amusing premise, but it could be more so.

Rating: 7/10. It made me chuckle, but it also made me wince. More chuckle and less wince please.

Water and Shade

This was a blast, and man, you certainly whooped some ** these past couple of days. Nice to see what that punk Gendo deserves, and Shinji's family is awesome.

Hoping to see more updates soon, pal.

Cool.
This certainly has the feel of the start of a very interesting birthday for Shinji.
Beyond what just happened here.

Well done, though I do have a minor quibble with the way you've portrayed Misato in all this.

Mainly because while yes, in the original series she was using Shinji to further her own personal vendetta against the Angels, she also took him into her home when she didn't have to and gave Shinji a mother figure when he had none (The fact that she tricked the poor kid into doing all the chores notwithstanding :P)

She comes off as bad as Ritsuko in this fic and that's unfair I think...

Awaiting next chapter eagerly however.

This one has been entertaining. It was a bit difficult to keep up with all the characters (and where they come from for that matter) but I recognized most fairly quickly. Pulling the object of Gendo's desire right out from under him was priceless. I'm curious to know if you are going to allow any of the original characters a chance for redemption with Shinji and his new family. Keep it up.