Not bad, please update soon.

Okay, I like the progression and plot of how this fic is going. However, the cacophony of syntactical, grammatical, and spelling errors are just simply too painful to read. You are not spelling everything out as you should. I understand you want to be nebulous about the bedside voice, however it only confuses the reader. You need to drop more clues that it was actually Nabiki from the beginning rather than clarify it was Nabiki after the impression it was someone else afterwards. Also, The constant switch from first to third person and to first person again in the narrator's voice without an indication of why or how it would clarify the story is murky.

please keep this going its really good so far and i would really like to see more of this... and actually not all guards are that dumb. although it would help if there was an anime that went with the guard scene.

looking forward to more

Nice, convincing chapter. But not much Nabiki in it. Oh well, I guess the RN stuff will start now.

Keep up the great work. =)

Sorry dude, but I just can't read this anymore. I got to chapter 3 but, as intriguing as the idea behind the story is, I just can’t get past the terrible grammar, spelling and sentence structure. A few mistakes here and there is one thing, but seemingly endless mistakes in just about every sentence and paragraph is something else altogether.

This could be really, really good. Buy you’ve gotta get yourself a proofreader or someone to edit your writing. Keep trying.

cool, keep up the god work.^^.

Errors and more erros, it hurts to read this

You need a prereader to clean it up a bit, there are some sections that the dialog is murky and confusing

so when the next update man... can't wait either... eheheheh...lol...

Ryu_Vision

awsome chapter keep it up

Update soon, please.

Good story. I hope you uupdate soon.

This story is really cool. I always liked Nabiki/Ranma than Ranma/Akane. I like how you have everything written out from the KAmi plane to the regular povs. I can't wait to read the next chapter. I hope you update soon.

Great job so far I really like it. Until next time keep up the good work.