It rhymes, the rhyme scheme is all over the place though. I personally prefer poems that don't rhyme, as long as they have a rhythm.

How did you do that? How did you get to undo the double space? Please tell me, I would really like to know.

Oh, I like it! It reminds me of the song 'Without You' from the musical RENT. Love the song, love the poem.

I like this one a lot. The vagueness of it is what makes it beautiful.

I enjoyed if very much :)

WOW you are really talented! Keep updating! or Update soon!

But whatever. Anyways. Really good. there wasn't one that I didn't like!

Adella

Hey la again! )

I REALLY like this one...so much so I'm considering stealing it... lol nah jsut messin! But maith thu! z

thank you soo much for the great advice! i can't tell you how much it means to me (that sounds so cheesy) like alwways i still love your poems and i can't wait for you next one!

Wow. You are a really talented poet. I loved all fo them a lot. Plz keep posting more they are great.

omgosh i love them all i just re-read them all again! if you have any advice for mine please tell!

:) Awesome. :)

Alison

LAURA! i haven't talked to you in so long! and i love your poem! it's amazing, as usual! it would make a good song...

i love this poem! i love all your poems! i'm so jealous my poems suck compared to this!

YAY! Finally SOMEONE who likes or even heard of The Dresden Dolls. Everyone i've asked goes "who?" I love the dresden dolls! I love half jack! I almost all of their songs! Especially Dirty Business.

Listen to me ramble...I love your poems! I could never write that good poems.

i think it would sound SO awesome with music. actually, i kinda had a beat going reading it(i know; it's poetry; ut supposed to read with a beat. but it was more...'musical' a beat than poetic...).

question tho. these are Twilight/New Moon poems, right? so when does this take place? a few after Edward leaves and Bellas' starting to act normal again?

anyway. i loved it!

-ALTA