 lunarlites 10/20/04 . chapter 1 Interesting...
This has promise.
THre are a few spots where u missplaced letters in some words.
An easy mistake to fix.
Please update soon! |
 Paladin Steelbreaker 5/21/02 . chapter 1Hi there!
Not much yet, but it sure has potential. I see the beginning of a greate fanfic. Please continue soon.
Greetings from Norway
Paladin Steelbreaker |
 Calvin Potterson not signed in 11/27/01 . chapter 1 Cliffhangers, cliffhangers. Clifhangers. Well, this sounds like a good mystery. Written well, keep writing! |
 mariel4000 11/2/01 . chapter 1 hey where's the rest? I'd like to see Hermi rescue Harry, and kick some Cho butt! |
 Ann 9/21/01 . chapter 1 I am likeing it a lot please write more |
 Fyremoon 7/18/01 . chapter 1good. deep. wow |
 Laura aka Rose 6/19/01 . chapter 1PLEASE FINISH! I LOVE THIS FIC |
 Corinne Cassandra Valard 6/7/01 . chapter 1Why on earth did Herm agree to go one on one with no magic. She could have kicked that b*tch's @$$ with magic. Never give your enemy the advantage. This story is going to be very good. |
 nikki 6/3/01 . chapter 1 I luv it! Keep on going! H/H forever! |
 ashkickerchic 5/26/01 . chapter 1please write more! pretty please! h/h rules! |
 Superkaty 5/21/01 . chapter 1This is really good! _
There are multiple spelling mistakes, but not enough to make it bad.
You just need a beta-reader.
Chopstick knives? That reminds me of something I saw on Ranma 1/2... is that where you got it?
Anyway, this is great, keep going. |
 Niffler 5/21/01 . chapter 1 Fantastic! This is already sounding great! I can't wait for more! |
 Leap 5/21/01 . chapter 1 Very intriguing, one question if Cho's chopsticks were actually knives, why wouldn't they cut her head, if chopstick are put in properly they are pressed up very close to the person's head. That's it very interesting story. |
 Laurel 5/21/01 . chapter 1 ? What's happening? |
 Emily15 5/21/01 . chapter 1H/H rules! |