Yumi : You took so long please publish it soon
Hiroto : Yumi you will destroy building if you shake it too roughly after all your power too much for anyone handle

*Next day Hiroto is found around destroyer building*

So you're...a pedophile who likes his little boys dressed in cat suits. That's about the grossest thing I've ever heard,

Yumi : Cute naruchan i wish i meet him...
Hiroto :...
Yumi : And then i will crossdressing him and...
Hiroto : ...
Yumi : Oh, so cute
Hiroto : Poor him
*Yumi punch him until death*

"Sasuke just couldn't keep his eyes off of was uncommonly good stroke of luck that he found a mate as beautiful and sweet-tempered as his knew Naruto's breed wasn't one of those important ones that decorated pet magazines, and that Naruto was a mutt between a fox and a cat that would not be deemed worthy to mother his kittens, if there had been choices for the breeder to select for Sasuke's could still smell the wild and dangerous scent that a female nine-tailed fox would carry, and he knew that it would be difficult for children between wolf-cat mix like himself and fox-cat mix like Naruto to be wolves and foxes belonged to canine family, and it was difficult for them to breed with felines like was probably the worst combination that Sasuke and Naruto, who were born of such difficult mating, would also mate; it was even possible that Naruto would never carry from the moment that he saw Naruto Sasuke knew that he was the only one he would ever want, and he did not hesitate in claiming the small kitten for himself."

You should check some of your sentence construction because this (above) contains very much info but it's really really hard to grasp even bits of that info. In your text are often similar mistakes but they aren't as confusing as this one.

The idea in this story is kind of cool. Keep writing.

idk if youll read this and i [hehe] havent even finished the chapted but*

i would like to *give cookie and hug* for killing sakura-**

^^

*sniffle and dramatically flicks tear away*

and so beautifully too :>

haha and cute how sasu only cares about sakura's dirty scent upseting lil naru <3

I am so enthralled with this story that I don't even if I used the word enthralled correctly! But seriously I can't wait to read on!

Please check this story. By the fourth chapter I had a hard time understanding the story, because of broken sentences, and half thoughts. Otherwise I really like it.

i just saw a dog show and on there was a perfict dog for Naruto lol tho i have yet to find any of the other animal counters to the people of Naruto i found this tale just after watching that and since have fallen in love with it thank you for writing it and sharing it with us also there are a few mistakes in some of the chapters other wise its very good

Sasuke has to worry about Sai, Orochimaru and his brother. From the way you've had Kakashi describe the Uchia breed when their mate is pregnant_ it doesn't make sense that he doesn't take Naruto and go back to Kakashi to keep his family safe. And he'd be stupid to think he could trust orochimaru_plus who would protect his mate and kit while he was fighting for Orochimaru for 1 year--again-against the logic of the uchia breed that you've already set up.

why does a cat need to take shooting lessons? I'm guessing there's going to be Sasuke with a gun shooting somebody later in the story.

It's not nice to leave such a cliff hanger for 7 months.
Look forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing the story. You've done a very good job of telling this story in an entertaining and enjoyable way.

Dear Shirohane,

I'm sorry for BloodySeraphim's comment, even though I don't know that person at all. I'm embarrassed for her/him, the ignorant human.

Please don't be sad and stop writing. I think all of your fanfictions are excellent. That person doesn't like Yaoi or Mpreg, and clearly there is something wrong with that person's head to be bashing you.

Thank you for writing. I will continue to support you in silent~!!

^_^

this is f*ed up. go find another site to pollute, you sick and twisted person.

aww sasuke might have to fight for orichimaru to protect naruto:( hinata's and neji's story is sad too. but i am sure neji will be able to see hinata again:) gaara and lee's story is cute too. even though gaara was kinda scary at first:P please continue soon!

wow
i love this story
cant wait for the next chapter
update please

*munches on a piece of cake* great story loved it keep up the great work lov the plotline it is really awesome lov the story overall though plzs update soon *cookies to the author*

Honestly...chapters 1-3 and after were brilliant.
But in ch.4 there were a lot of missing words and punctuation, making it hard to focus on the story.

You should consider having someone bata it...