this story is kinda no where near finished and u have not updated in months. i kno i am reading this story late but geez you left me hanging here. update quickly plz!

This is such a wonderfully written story. c: Pity it hasn't been updated for so long, it's so interesting.

okay so I realize this is like an ancient story in ff time, but I review any story I like. You took the time to write it, the least I can do is take the time to tell you that I enjoy it, right.

So yah, great story.

Excellent storyline, but the chapters are too short. Fun to read, makes you want to read more. I like it.

Try to make things happen slower. In some places you did all right, but in others the narration could be extended. For example, (not from this story,) 'Jenny and company decided that it was too dangerous to continue into the cave' is sadly lacking, not only in descriptions, but you don't hear them conversing, which allows the writer to express more of, er... the character's character. This was an example made up from the top of my head, and it is obviously nowhere in your story. However, there are several places where you could have written more conversation or details to make it better.

That is the only down I can think of now, but it's a great story, and I am looking forward to reading more.

It's been a really long time since you updated... nice work on this chapter :)
Update more!

damn, thats catchy. of course im going to read it now. 'poor prolouge' yea right.

Nice chapter! Glad to see you updated!

Hope you update soon(er than the last time...) XP lol.

I'm so glad you posted a new chapter! ^-^ I love this story. Please write some more. I can't wait to see what happens next!

Yeah. Right.
Give me the reward, and a new chapter, and I'm gone again! (coughs)
I'm just joking. I want to tell you your story is good! Funny, those chapters from Nouda. I wonder what happens...

O... nice...

If you're going into the time-period speculation, also keep in mind that there appears to be no monarchy and Gladstone is really huge.

This is one of the best Barty fics that I have read. Keep up the excellent work! and now you receive the honor of getting the first award that I have ever given out: the Pep Rally Applause! This award eqautes with hearing a bunch of pumped up teens blowing your ears out from the cheering, thus bolstering your ego ten-fold. Possible side effects include: temporary loss of hearing, a large migrane, and an inflated head. Keep writing, mate! *disapears in a guff of smoke*

Pfft. I liked the Baskin Robbins part...

So am I Korean. Huh.

Marid? Did I hear right?
And it has too be a fearsome powerful magician to summon an afrit... getting your facts twisted a little, aren't you?

I like it so far. Good to see those old foot notes again.