 rachel 12/18/09 . chapter 1 not bad! you have a promising future in writing- as your writing is vivid, concise, and interesting. however, you have a few flaws to work out. you need to let your characters explain themselves and their own personalities by their words and action, not by narrating their personalities. your book leaves nothing to be desired in the future, though it's a fun read. take out some character explanation and you will have a very good manuscript in your hands! keep on writing! |
 carmabell713 11/3/06 . chapter 4Wow that was a long chapter but i loved it! I don't think however that the pants will fit them trying to be someone they're not. but hey just a suggestion. ;-} |
 GreatAmericanAuthor 10/28/06 . chapter 3The chapter was great!I so totally love Tiffany's character. I've read through all chapters and she's my fav, closely followed by Delia.Please, please, please keep writing post soon! |
 Norwegianchick101 5/15/06 . chapter 2y do i have the feeling Carmen's pregnant? and another premonition-the pants are so totally in the attic! |
 coolmarauders 5/13/06 . chapter 2block paragraph of dom! I like the characterizations of the girls, but SPACE BETWEEN DIALOGUE. YES.
and also, I would suggest getting a beta, because in both these chapters there have been quite a few mistakes that just are a little annoying. Like "teh" or "eh" instead of "the." They aren't major mistakes, but they are irritating ones.
prongs |
 buckichick22 5/10/06 . chapter 2Who is Tiffany's father? When did Lena meet Mike? Who is Carmen's husban. What happened to Brian with Tibby? |
 Emily Giraffe 5/6/06 . chapter 2Second Chapter: oh my word. Two huge blocks of text. No offense, but that makes people not want to read it. Since you're supposed to make a new paragraph for each new speaker, its kind of.. not well written, in that aspect. But its a good story, just try to make the next chapter easier to read! |
 Emily Giraffe 5/4/06 . chapter 1pretty good! keep it up. |
 K.M. Major 5/4/06 . chapter 1Dear Korea Gal,
This story is wonderful! What a creative idea! I look forward to the next part of it, so please finish it soon!
K.M. Major |
 carmabell713 5/1/06 . chapter 1I LOVE IT! I love everything about it. Esspecially that the I can totally see that girls acting that way when they are older! Like I said I LOVE IT! Keep up the great work! |
 dolphinsquealll 4/25/06 . chapter 1I loved this story, and I can't wait until the next chapter. Write on! |
 The one the only PROBIE 4/24/06 . chapter 1Ok first of all i found this story mundane, Discombobulating and ubquitated. I find these stories quite repulsive. WHO THE HELL WANTS TO WEAR PANTS SOMANY OTHERS HAVE WORN? i mean hello higeine and another thing what kinda of pants fit all sizes any way? I mean come on you expect me to believe that one size fits all!:O IS IT JUST ME? HAS THE WORLD GONE CRAZY? or is it the aliens? Apart from that, good story. _ |
 Bee Vreeland 4/22/06 . chapter 1This is a REALLY great story! There's just enough information about each character, and I love how the girls aren't TOO much like their moms. However, do you really think that the Sisterhood wouldn't have seen each other in thirteen years? I don't know if you have an idea for that. Otherwise, brilliant story! |