Love the chapter and love how Rui got to shine here. Too Bad she didn't have a Minum in the Pokemon Colosseum game then This would've been much easier but still I like how Rui is a Wallflower with Thorns. Fits the chapter quite well.

Interesting change from First Person to Third Person View Point. Nice touch. I think that if this story had more reviews then you would be inspired to write more. Still I think that You're doing a good job so far. Keep up the good work.

Nice work. If you keep writing You'll have much more reviews. Probably because You haven't updated the story yet. By the way Love the Thundershock Treatment that Trudly and Foley got in this chapter.

2 Years Later and things are still going well. Guess that Mona is going to bring some of her Sinnoh Region Pokemon out to play?

Nice to see that Rui has a back bone. I'm starting to like this story more. Perhaps you should consider making a pokemon XD tale with Mona as the main character.

Hey there! :D I am also writing a story about wes/pokemon colusseum, so I was quite interested in this. Im'a too lazy to review every chapter, so I'll give some quick tips about the whole thing.

1: Cartoony feel

It seemed like this story was a little "cheesy" in places, like how your character got sucked in through a TV. I like how she went into the Pokemon world, but through a TV? I found these two bits of chapter 4 especially cheesy.

(ABRUPT SILENCE)

(Heroes: Flat Faces / Me: Eye roll “Baka”)

(Cipher Grunts: Nervous Expressions)

“We did…” The trio replied simultaneously.

“Well…you three better stay out of our way or things would get ugly for you!” Foley said aloud.

“Sorry but since we know what you are, I won’t…” Wes responded.

“Neither will we!” Ash and I replied simultaneously, and then stared at each other.

“We’ve got to stop doing that…” I muttered.

It would have been excellent in a cartoon (In fact, this whole story would have been.) But you've gotta remember that you're writing a fanfic.

2: Lack of Description

Also, there's some places where your description is sparse, and you assume that the reader just "knows" what things look like.

(Note: He’s still in his Hoenn/KBF outfit)

I've got very little idea what that is. Sure, I could look it up, but no reader should have to do that.

However, though I don't really agree with your interpretation of Wes's personality, the interactions between him and Ash are funny, and the budding MonaxAsh romance? NAW. :3

I think Esper and Nox should find some cute Eeveelution sisters. XD

Awesome, keep up the good work!

Woah...only five reviews? This story so deserves more!

Update soon,

WITS

foxie: yay you continued

darki: *is chained to the wall* let me down

sonica: *is holding a mew and a pikachu* don't i'm a hedgehog who is wanted dead by a hedgefoxda hedgehog/fox/echinda

foxie: ... k and the pokemon are what her brothers got her anyway continue

Once again, you surprise me with another good story. I'm impressed with how you have changed the original storyline and even added in Ash to it. Keep up the good work and like I said in another review to you, Keep updating and I will keep reading. I'm also glad to see you are still researching your Japanese. Good job with that.

Mata Ato De, Mona-san!

-Ryu Toukon

I like it how you changed it, so keep it up. I can't wait until you update again, so do it soon!

Foxie: Wow I like the story so far.

Sonica: I know I can't wait to read more of the story.

Darki: Is it going on story alert then?

Foxie: Yep it is. Isn't it Sonica?

sonica: Yeah course . It looks like it's two to one then.

WOW GREAT WORK ON THE STORY!