i loved it so much emashine

aww that was really god!

It's good ignore the criticism. You caught the emotions of the song, you potrayed it the way it was supposed to be. It sounds weird but your story just it's right. There is no other way to describe it it's just right!

got to say love it absolutly love it. keep it up!!

It was good, a little cliche, but who doesn't need a story like that every once in a while :p. Your grammar and spelling could do with improvement but nothing that cant get better with time and experience. If you need or want a beta, Ill help. My email is on my user page if your interested.

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Lyric-heavy stories are annoying, as if you can't come up with a story of your own. Plus, you SERIOUSLY need a spell checker AND a beta reader. Story line is weak, but could work with some effort.

I'm a gsr fan..I have to say I really don't like your story..sorry. It's too..cliche..:|

i loved it, sweet, sad, happy... perfect :)