Uh, that's so sad! It had so much potential of being good. It's a fairy tale, their supposed to be "happily ever after". If I could change it, make it a little longer, have Casius find out what happened, torture and kill, or just torture until they got the point, each of the WHORES who did that to Thalea. To make it good, you could have had her see the Goddess again and have her lead her to Casius, and they could run away together. Or at least be able to be friends for the rest of their lives. SOMETHING needs to happen to those four HARLOTS for what they did. Their priestesses, they aren't supposed to torture and give out punishment, and if the Goddess lead Thalea to safety, don't you think she would have made her life at least a little more happy. Sorry, that just my opinion. Other than that, it could've been cute.