I would like to think that Mary Sue Smith did Impress a queen and did make it to Pern via the Bahrain, and that it was SueSlayer who lay in that room, madder than anything Lewis Carroll could envision. However, in all likelihood, the insane woman was both Mary Sue and SueSlayer, believing wildly inventive horrors were at her command, as well as the space/time continuum. Engaging.

I really like this! I'm sorry I'm not reviewing more but I keep wanting to read the next chapter so I end up clicking the next button instead of sending in a review. Very well done.

Wow. Very over the top but in a good way. Not something most people would have thought of.

I must say that your use of sues an sue-thors was amazing (so like many of those I see running around Gaia...) and the story in general was fun to read. Keep up the good work, and keep the parodies coming!

I hadn't noticed you finished this. Nice!

Wow... the epilogue was unexpected. I have another thought- maybe ot's SueSlayer in the room? I can imagine her laughing like that. Or maybe the code induces some form of hypnosis makling the people think they're in Pern.

ALso; I was quite surprised that Mary impressed gold- but she *is* a Sue, as I keep forgetting, so maybe I shouldn't have been surprised.

-BloodyHellRose
The Mad VAmpiress

Sorry. I'm an incorrigible happy endings girl. I'll stick with chapter 12, thanks. Not that chapter 13 is bad, but...

Anyway, thanks for writing this - it's been a real laugh, and I've enjoyed following along!
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Cool! It's done! Not that I didn't like it. It's just nice to get to the end.

And you didn't even see all the possible interpretations of the ending. It could be SueSlayer! It could be... you, the author, convinced of the truthfullness of your own tale!

Anyway, cool. The last couple of chapters made a good ending.

What a lot of twist and turns in your story I read all this time, try to follow your story line. But what a way to do it.
I hope your done with this kind of line for it made me shiver to I try to wirte this way.

(tilts head thoughtfully) Perhaps... Perhaps part of Mary ended on Pern, and the rest was consigned to madness. She went down, but I think SueSlayer might have gone with her.

That's the feeling I get, anyway.

Well played, astrokath. (applauds) As always, fine imagery, great grammar, spelling and punctuation, and a compelling read. Mary Sue was perhaps the most human out of everyone in the story. I'm glad you shared this with us. ^n_n^

That was amazingly good, and the ambiguous ending is leaving readers either hanging or drawing their own conclusions. This leads me to state the opinion of myself and my fellow Sue enthusiasts (we are very few, I am sorry to say): Sues should be studied, perhaps parodied, and constructively criticised, not flamed or destroyed. Mary Sues are a natural stage in writers' skill development, and most people grow out of it (I know I did, for more info on that, see my Avatar: the Last Airbender story Temper of a Firebender). SueSlayers beware: the enthusiasts will do anything possible to prevent you from ruining young writers' skill development.

o... eerie. I have to say, when I saw that Mary Sue (so weird...) became a dragonrider, I immediately thought "Sue alert!"... weird.

And the way it sounds, the final epilogue makes it seem like it was poor Mary Sue who ended up like that. Poor her...

I'm tempted to go with chapter 13's ending, just because it's so horrible! LOL!

Bah! LOL! What a way for me to start the day reading this. You've brought a smile to my face!

What should be next? Another delay, apparently! Not that I should be talking, seeing as I haven't updated my story in about the same amount of time.

I really wasn't expecting that. Wonder what'll happen next? You're doing a great job on this story so far, although I personally think repeat-offense Sue Authors deserve the worst they can get...

-BloodyHellRose
The Mad Vampiress

I love this story. I hope you write the ending soon. Its quite a funny story.