Too cutesy, too blunt, too gushy. Neither characters would open up so quickly about something as traumatizing as child abuse. Especially child abuse.

The court scene was good with the sudden depicting of the secret, but Sara suddenly rushing up to him and blurting out about her father? Nononononono.

Really THINK about the situation and put yourself in it before posting it on the internet.

EW sappy at the end, but it's still good.

thats so sweet

that was really great

Oh i nearly cried that was so sweet!!

err...well, the courtroom scene was rather unrealistic (the prosecution didnt even object about relevance), but the part when they go back to sara's was really sweet/sad...

aw

Aw, I liked it. Sad at what their parents did to them, but good job.

Oh, so good! Also very sad! Please write more!

cute

Very very awful, what happened to them. You did such a beautiful job of making it all better. Very nice story.

happy ending

Very good story, wonderfully done