It has great potential. I liked the portrayal of the characters, and you picked a good enough pairing. Your writing actually made the pairing better, which means you write well.

Please keep it up, and update! Please update!

That was awsome! *sends 10ft long piece of chocolate* My second favorite Joshua pairing. My first is Joshua/Natasha by the way.

I have to say your author notes make me want to truly scream: Finally!

I've always hated how it seems most authors seem to have this "Y'know, this is a romance fic so lets just get to the fluff now shall we?" I even read one fic that said something along the lines of "I've only known her for a week and I think I'm falling in love with her!" it's my personal belief that it never happens that way in real life. So I hate it when fics have this 'love a first sight, kiss at second day, marriage on forth!' speed to them.

I also enjoyed your character interaction, as Tana/Joshua isn't a pairing matched with Supports, there's nothing to feed directly off of, thus the author must have a good grasp of each character. Which you seem to have as I can't notice anything wrong yet.

One thing did bother me though. The story seemed a bit choppy. By that I mean that the transitions seem to not flow very well, and possibly came too close together to flow well. Although, this may just be me, I have a Ent like personality with the way I read/write "If it's worth saying, it's worth taking a long, long time to say..." So my suggestion? Slow down a bit and give a bit of detail, and then with the contradiction, in some cases try not to give too much. If you are writing combat for example (which is the hardest in my book,) you need to give a good amount of detail, but (atleast in my experience) give it in short, choppy sentences. Many sentences to give the details of the battle, short sentences to remind the reader that the protagonist isn't going to be observing everything very carefully. A duel can be more in depth in description, but when we're talking about the more massive battles Fire Emblem tends to bring, a sense of chaos is a must for the thing.

That's about all I got right now, so keep up the good work!

~Duderlybob

Another chapter of your Joshana fic!

Overall, good job. Some of the wording sounded odd in some places, but nothing flagrantly out of the ordinary. There were a few bits I noticed, though:

"That alone wouldn’t have been bad, but her back and legs were killing her too" -Did you mean to write WOULD rather than wouldn't? Because I would expect the one injury to be painful enough on its own! XD

"Are you willing to let down so many people just because you don’t think you can handle it?” Joshua continued, his tone growing heated." -Joshua seems a tiny bit out of character here, specifically in the fact that I don't know if I've ever seen him truly angry. His displeasure tends to show itself in the use of sarcasm, biting wit, and sardonic language, from what I've seen.

"“Yes, no thanks to you.” Joshua grumbled angrily" -Same thing here.

The last thing I noticed is that Innes came to his senses pretty easily. Being the stubborn ox that he is, even when apologizing I would expect him to be curt.

Other than that, good job!

That was really well done! Can they have Support? I'll have to check.

I really love how you keep referring to "what a queen needs" all the way through. The repetition is like an anchoring point which gives the story rhythm.

Ah, timelines. Timelines are hellspawn...so damn awkward. So, I feel for you, mate. Isn't it irritating when you finish a chapter and realise there's a massive plot hole?

I really like the way your writing flows - great job!

Oh, and one last thing. Your Joshua is great - you write him really well.

Keep up the good work!

I liked the descriptions in this chapter. Of her pain, of the conversations, etc. It seems like she is forming a small crush on Joshua, even though she is in that stage of denial.

Innes' characterization is a bit exaggerated. While he can be a bit of jerk in his concern for Tana, I think you went a little too far with it. And I doubt that he would apologize so suddenly after a talk with Joshua.

Other than that, nice chapter. Keep it up! :)
~Lemurian-Girl~

Interesting pairing indeed, but it seems like it could work out. So far, you have their relationship down nicely. They don't have instant crushes on each other; they're just friendly with eachother. Points to you for that.

My only nitpick is that people seem to look down on Tana a little bit more harshly than they do in the game. But it works for the story; so, I don't mind it too much.

The last line is a nice cliffhanger. No glaring grammar mistakes, and it looks like it will turn out to be an interesting story. :)
~Lemurian-Girl~

Heh, a Joshua and Tana romantic pairing. A bit odd, but definitely a fun idea.

I tend to be nitpicky about characterization, so I'll mention one point that seemed to stand out for me as being OOC. When Joshua talks to Innes about him constantly belittling her, it appears Innes gives in too easily, and in a very matter - of -fact kind of way. Maybe adding the fact that Innes mused over what Joshua said BEFORE starting to talk would make it more believable.

Grammar and spelling are done well enough - nothing too glaring. Overall, a good story so far - I hope to see the conclusion soon.

Aww... Tana's in love with Joshua!

Hello, Link. I'm Gunlord, moderator of Lemurian-Girl's FE Writer's Guild. Since you posted this story in the Little Circle of Reviewyness, I hope you won't mind that I review it? ^_^

First off, a couple of minor adjustments you could make...

"his younger sister, a shorter that had her navy blue hair"

A shorter...what? ^^; I think you omitted a word around that part D:

"Anyone with your measure of bravery deserves a couple of helpers."

'Helpers' sounds a tad awkward...'couple of friends,' maybe? :D

Hmm...those were all the errors I could find. Very nice work, my friend. Joshua and Tana are well in character, and honestly, after reading this, I had to look at FE8's support screen to actually figure out it was a crack pairing! That's how convincingly you portrayed their relationship ^^ It ends on a cliffhanger, though, with Tana plummeting to the ground...I hope you consider continuing this fic sometime! ^_^

Yay! It's Joshua! The gambling king is definitely one of my favorite characters; he's just so fun to read! ^_^ But a Joshua/Tana pairing? Wow, I didn't see that coming. This promises to be interesting; I've enjoyed what I've read so far, at any rate! I'll make sure to stay posted on it!

Hm, I liked this, keep on going, both characters seem very in-character :P

Joshua, the typical gambling nice guy xD

Haha, so, you took up Writer Awakened's challenge. Was Joshua's coin always two headed...would explain why he joined the party in the first place so easily...if Natasha did yell for heads...can't remember. Great job, looking forward to the next chapter where Joshua probably saves Tana from dying just a guess...not likely.

I have to say, Joshua is my all-time favorite FE8, no FE character. I think you're keeping him well in character, which almost automatically makes your story good. I also like Tana (who always turns out godly whenever I play through...) and I think she's in character too. Putting them together is pretty interesting and I'm looking forward to how it turns out.