dude! wright more! u take too long! this is so awesome!

I really like this, the author NEEDS to write more, it is so
E-K-S-T-ING aka, exciting. i like this kinda stuff. heheh.

Nice! I like the story so far! Nice job, and keep up the good work!

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"Blobs don't talk of fly. I do both!" lol.

Yayz! Cool story! I hope you update soon!

please continue

You know, this seems rather interesting! What with Kagome and Link stuck together! XD And Inuyasha and Navi... *laughs* Anyway, I hope you can update soon!
Ja ne,
BLoodcherry

interesting

Oh wow! This is so freaking cool! This story's great but...will it have a Link x Kagome?(my favorite pairng!) Either way...I'm sticking around!

Chapter one: Introduction to Hyrule...Legends unfolded
[I feel the need to point out right away that Inuyasha would notice Kagome’s lack of presence quickly, and focus in on that even faster once realized. Yet he never asks where she is or shouts for her, as he has in every similar instance in the anime/manga.]

Apparently, Navi found him somewhat trustful as she continued,
[I wouldn’t find him trustful, so much as deciding that he’s not enough of a threat to remain at greater than arm’s length. I think Navi would think the same thing, and decide that while he hasn’t done anything to earn further trust, she would decide that the need to be secretive (or at least guarded) would make her approach and whisper.]

InuYasha didn’t reply as he looked at the stained walls and strange markings on the floor, all thoughts of Kagome temporarily forgotten.
[I think this would be doubtful. Unless this is the Inuyasha within the first month of meeting Kagome (which he isn’t, judging by the fact that they’re arguing over ramen and he later uses the Wind Scar without being restrained by needing to clash against an enemy’s youki), he’d realize “Kagome’s not here” and hyperfocus on that. To keep more in line with his character, I think he’d look around for signs of Kagome and slowly take in the environment through that perspective.]

It also looked as if there were a few bodies that had just been recently removed.
[Given the earlier description, I think it would be better to remove this sentence. His sense of smell would say the same thing, and is dealt with in the next sentence.]

He could still smell the blood, but it was stale.
[Since the above paragraph didn’t logically add to the scene, this one would have to be expanded a little:]
He could smell the stale traces of blood, indicating that a few bodies had been recently removed.

There were crumpled heaps in far off corners,
[If these are the bodies, wouldn’t his super-human hanyou eyes spot them? I’d think so, and the mention that the bodies had been removed implies that they are no longer in the area at all, not just that they’ve been moved. They need to be better described (and decided if they need to emit a bad smell or not).]

“I’m not a blob! I’m a fairy!” snapped Navi as the crossed the bridge.
[Not having mentioned anything about the fact that, judging by the bridge being pointed out and the conversation, that Inuyasha is far faster than Link on Epona and has reached the Lost Forest/Kokiri Forest far faster than Link ever has. And Navi doesn’t mention the fact.]

Her definition was ignored by InuYasha who was busy looking at the small Kokiris as they darted by.
[Though it may not be universally certain, I believe that “Kokiri” acts for both singular and plural. The fact that Japanese nouns by default do this doesn’t make translating it any easier.]

Small life forms flitted around,
[The first time I read this, I had a flashback to Star Trek: Generations, with Data’s little song. It’s funny because neither seem to mean anything. The ‘air-centipede-like-things’ are generally agreed to be chains of fairies, at least so some assume. Whatever they are, give a slightly more clear description if you’re going to draw attention to them.]

“We need to get past please Mido!
[If it’s so urgent, the ‘please’ would likely be dropped from the sentence. If it’s not, it needs to be separated by a comma after ‘past’.]

Giving InuYasha a weird glance, he answered slowly.
[First: don’t mix sources in paragraphs. One paragraph is for Navi, the next should be for Mido. Second: Mido would probably throw a suspicious glare/glance at InuYasha.]

With that said he leaped over Mido and started to jog away.
[‘Away’ could imply from anything in general, such as jogging out of the forest. I think you want to be sure to imply ‘onward’ or something like that.]

Navi shook herself and little beads of light floated downwards, intersecting with the glowing organisms.
[After reading this sentence several times, I still don’t know what it’s supposed to say. Does she shake herself of her surprise and fly down amid the fairy-chains? That’s the closest I can guess, but it still doesn’t perfectly seem to match this sentence.]

she flew off down the overgrown passageway after InuYasha, still in a bit of a daze.
[Since the last name identified is Inuyasha, there is an implication that Inuyasha is in a bit of daze – and though that happens more often than one would think, it’s still not often. If you would add ‘at Inuyasha’s brazenness’, that would clarify the who and what more.]

Mido was the head honcho after the Deku Tree and didn’t really tolerate rudeness.
[The ‘really’ isn’t necessary. Use strong language, say he either _did_ or _didn’t_ tolerate rudeness.]

The tree was silent for a while. “Hm… so it has happened,” he paused, allowing the words to seep into attentive ears and giving their owners time to dwell on this statement.
[Don’t mix sources within a paragraph. Create a paragraph break here and let ‘when the Deku Tree’ start a new one.]

“I regret to inform you, but I cannot release all the information as of right now. As a matter of fact, I do not know enough to even confirm my own suspicions.
[Putting it more succinctly is better than stringing it out:]
I regret to inform you that I do not even know enough to confirm my own suspicions.

But the biggest problem would be the disappearances of the Sages.
[I would think it would more closely match the Deku Tree’s speech patterns for him to say the “greatest” problem instead of “biggest”.]

New Sages have awakened of course,
[‘New sages’ implies that the old ones are gone or not fulfilling the role of sages any more. That means you’ll have to contend with role-switching and probably trying to make working original characters. Just a concern to remain aware of.]

I suspect that they have returned to their original resting place. However, some have not.
[Wow! How magically clear! …as mud.]

For example, the Kokiri Emerald has not rejoined to this place.
[Should be either “…has not been rejoined to…” or “…has not joined this place…”]

It may not even be necessary to go to all,
[If it’s not necessary, don’t draw attention to them. Instead of saying, ‘I’m sending you on a wild goose chase’, which is the implication that comes across here, I’d say “I am not sure if you will find help in all…”]

It looked rather like an oversized troll, equipped with spiked armor and shoulder plates and a large wooden club, also with dull spikes.
[Unclear. It would be better to say “…wooden club studded with dull spikes.”]

Navi asked, flying over the large groves made by the Tessaiga.
[This would be unclear to readers not familiar to the InuYasha fandom. Just adding “in the ground” would help imply that he sent out an attack of some sort that tore up the ground.]

InuYasha left Navi to catch up.
[Again InuYasha’s physical abilities far surpass Link’s, and Navi doesn’t so much as bat an eyelid…metaphorically speaking.]

Still waiting for chapter 2 (or 3, depending on where the counting begins). I hope you have the time to check one of my stories.

God bless and happy writing,
Ganheim

This is but one of the legends of which the people speak…
[And yet this story weaves together two. As such, I’d get straight into the legend of the Triforce and delete this line.]

Not long ago,
[In a galaxy not really far away…no, that doesn’t seem to work either. The introductions generally serve to familiarize the audience with the differences between the story and the life we currently live, and this doesn’t clearly do so. Since this phrase doesn’t help inform us, I’d replace it with ‘once’ as a sentence opener. ‘Long ago’ provides a sense of time backdrop, but ‘not long ago’ could be anywhen.]

But then, when all hope had died, and the hour of doom seemed at hand…
[Overuse of “but”, I’d delete the “but then” beginning this sentence, and then the flow and grammar is okay.]

“Oh, come on, InuYasha!
[To increase the poignant effect, I’d delete the preceding ‘oh, come on’ so it goes straight to “Inuyasha”, which will also strengthen the transition.]

You were the one who came here to get me because I was taking to long.”
[Commonly confused words: using ‘to’ instead of ‘too’.]

It was a prosperous land, blessed with green forests, thriving villages, and in a sense, peace.
[The ‘in a sense’, though technically correct, interrupts the flow of the narrative. I’d delete it.]

who was grabbed in foreign cloths.
[Confused words: grabbed, instead of “garbed” (to be clothed in).]

But then, there came a day when a new light shone threw the land.
[Though the previous sentence starts with ‘but then’, the ‘then’ opening this sentence is necessary. However, to keep from repeating the same words in close proximity, you should delete ‘but’. Take out the comma so ‘then’ leads straight into the rest of the sentence and it will be fine.]

At first glance, she would look like a glowing orb with wings, but upon inspection, the wings were different colors and she wasn’t a one color blue.
[Repeating ‘color’ too often in close proximity. I’d replace the latter with ‘wasn’t a _solid_ blue’.]

Navi looked flabbergast at this.
[Tense: flabbergasted.]

Getting threw Hyrule field was never easy, especially when he was a child.
[Confused words: threw (past tense of ‘to throw’), should be ‘through’ (by means of).]

And after some quickly passing time, he arrived at the drawbridge shortly after the sun began its decent.
[The beginning of this sentence is muddled, the best suggestion I can think of is to delete everything before the comma. Confused words: decent (civilized, respectable) when it should be descent (to fall or sink).]

The red carpet felt soft and plush under his boots, and looked very comfterable.
[Spelling: comfortable.]

The walls were a smooth gray marble and upon it, glittered patterns from the surrounding windows.
[Grammar: delete the comma, it disjoints the narrative and shouldn’t be there.]

Still revolving slowly,
[Spinning around through the room? Or are they calmly rotating in their sockets?]

they caught light and reflected it all around them.
[When light shines on things, it tends to reflect. This looks a bit like a cop-out description that doesn’t clearly describe anything. If you want to tell us that the sunlight reflects into sparkles across the walls, that’s okay, that tells us something, but as it is this doesn’t say anything.]

up the four or so steps and into the room beyond.
[The author not sounding definite brings into question whether he or she knows what is being written about, and though that’s more important for essays and theses, even in fiction we want to sound confident and certain. It’s four steps, by the way.]

The walls were no longer the smooth marble as before, but were covered in splotches of a reddish brown.
[In no way does this clearly indicate that there is blood splattered across the walls. By the way, the stone walls in the chamber of time are the same as outside, what you wanted to indicate is that they’re not clean or pristine, they’re defiled by blood.]

Again, he climbed the three stairs before him, all the while thinking, ‘Whose idea was it to put so many stairs in here?’
[‘Made his way forward’ clearly enough conveys that he gets himself to the Master Sword, this doesn’t add anything to the narrative, so I’d delete it.]

Accompanying him was a girl dressed quite oddly indeed.
[There is no transition between noticing that he’s in a tunnel and him noticing Kagome. The phrasing here implies that she teleported with him, but she was there already. You should phrase this as her being noticed while he’s examining his surroundings.]

This was certainly an interesting beginning, the chapters are a nice read. Keep up the good work. Check out one of my stories, too, please.

God bless and happy writing,
Ganheim

O! X3 This is getting interesting. ^^ Wonder why the Great Deku Tree knew of Inuyasha? Hm... But don't tell me! I'd like to find out myself =P

CONTINUE PPLLEASE!

You should update soon! THis is pretty good if you ask me, this is cool! Update soon!

SISTER'S REVIEW: Finally I find something new! I've been looking for new Legend of zelda and Inuyasha crossovers for a long time! I like your story. Also if you want to see Brother review you are going to have to update, and I have to like it! (evil laugh)

BROTHERS REVIEW: (muffled sounds of help coming from a door)

SISTER: (kicks door) Urusai! You're ruining my threat!

Well, it seems interesting. It's detailed just enought to give you a picture. Please update soon!