: ) sweet! thisa sweet fic

Great fic!

"Oh well THAT's interesting."

... What happened to Ryoga, tho... And you know what? this... is somehow leading towards platonic Ranma Akane,.. if that's the pairing you want... put some romance in there!! XDD I guess the star gazing does count as love... thing... and the date later... and the dinner... okay nevermind what I said. Nice job! I still want to see Ryoga... What happens now? Why did he want to kill Ranma? and what about the vision Ranma had...? and are you REALLY going to let Ranma go from his depression THAT easily? I'll stay tuned! XD

I'm getting more and more happy about choosing to read this fic. 8D

EW.
THAT is my reaction right after reading the first few paragraphs.

flesh sliding down throat? Ew. GROSS. Isn't that supposed to choke you? Medieval Korean women used to do that when surrounded... or when they didn't have the small silver knife ready for suicide with them. I heard it's NOT a very nice way to go... GREAT. NOW I'm imagining Ranma with blood flowing down from his mouth... EW. Again. URGH.

*snort* Crickets ... CD deal.. where the hell do you get these ideas!! XD

Right. you've GOT TO stop scaring me like that. Seriously. GOD. I was like, WHAT THE HELL DID RYOGA JUST BEAT THE ** OUT OF RANMA WITH HIS CLASSMATES OF WHAT THE F IS GOING ON until I've read the part where he was asking for Akane... But then does that mean that Ryoga was one of the bullies...? Then why does he want to kill Ranma?Surely he isn't THAT evil... I mean, EVERYONE portrays him as sweet innocent, lost boy. who knows a lot of destructive martial arts...I'll wait and see...

Heh. I like this.. A lot, actually. XD I'd LOVE it if it had any pairing... preferably Ranma Ryoga... especially after THAT @/@ happening... Oh well.. I still like it a lot.. I wonder why Ryoga wants to kill Ranma... hmm I don't think he'll try to kill Ranma when he's all pathetic like that... would he? Really well done, I'm anticipating to read the rest! XD

Excellent chapter, can't wait to see what happens next.
plz update soon. ^~^

New reader.. have to say.good story here and I look forward to more

I just happened to come upon this while browsing and was intrigued by how long you've been writing this and constantly updating it through the years. The plot hook in the story description intrigued me, but your altaverse method of introducing Ranma as a victimized mute in the first chapter captivated me. It's refreshing even after all these years of reading Ranma fics to stumble upon an original story like this.

I think your pacing to this story is fine so far as the events you've portrayed up to this point (chp 2) deal with character development which is fine for fast moving sequences in your prose. The characterization is perfectly fine too, due to the fact that this is your own crafted universe and an alternate revision of the canon material. I like how you've portrayed the mute and emotionally scarred (fig/liter.) Ranma, as you're attempting to go beyond the flat, slapstick mannerisms people love to conveniently put in. I look forward to see how his progression goes, and anxious to see if it gets darker and at the least more serious.

Another note so far, although I'm not sure if it's you or not. I noticed some of the scene breaks don't exactly transition? Perhaps did you have line breaks that you inserted in your word processor that didn't make it over when uploaded to ? Because I had the exact same problem too with my own stories when I upload .txt files.

Finally, a little note at least to this point in terms of the writing mechanics involved. Some of the interactions between characters were confusing because you mixed one character's actions or dialogue with another character's in the same paragraph. Split them up, differentiate them to establish a perspective and point of view for what you're trying to portray in the prose. Perhaps this has been rectified in future chapters, since I'm only on the second one and your latest chapter has been updated literally years later.

Anyway, enjoyed the read and I'm going back to enjoy some more.

I'm so glad you continue your story! This is really the kind of Ranma fanfiction I love. Though, I don't really get the point with the curse and the healing, but, well, in fact I understood lol (my first language is not english...)
Continue it, i can't wait ^^

I can't express how much I enjoyed reading that last inner debate. To express such a message (that all life has worth, even if only for the potential it still has) from the point of view of someone in the pit of despair (a cliche, I know, but an appropriate one) is something that just seems wonderful. I hope to continue reading this soon.

From the offices of AMWOOD co

I have no criticisms about how you have written this. It is well written. Not pro-level, but adequate.

I DO, however, have criticisms about the story itself. I am under the impression that everyone is a little too emotional and depressed. Furthermore, I question your premise.

1. How did Ranma NOT die? The cats would of eaten him after the cat food ran out and they got hungry again.
2. Ranma was a child. Children produce very little scar tissue. Ranma wouldn't be scarred from head to toe unless the wounds were severe enough for him to die from them. Furthermore, Children have less skin to scar. Ranma's scars (except the neck ones) wouldn't be very bad at all in the situation you describe.
3. Even if the cats didn't eat them, Ranma would of died of thirst. ESPECIALLY with all the blood loss. He was there for over a week.
4. Genma wouldn't let his heir be so bloody emo. On another note, Breaking limbs is not an accepted practice in most circles, and Genma CHEERED HIM ON.

While the story is of adequate quality, it seems you overblown the issues here.

Interesting, I must say. This is pretty good. Keep it up. :)

Beautifully painful, tender and rare, just the way I like it in the middle of the night. The thought that I'm a freak for enjoying other peoples' pain has occured, as has that of you being one for coming up with this sort of stuff, but then I remember that no one is perfect, and that the only evil is that which hurts others. Great story, I really look forward to the rest of it.