Aw... I like how he is saying to go away but then he wants forgiveness. : ( I think it is interesting to see free-verse. I like how you have one-word lines. It makes it interesting and have a nice rhythm.

Absolutely beautiful To-chan! I loved it when you showed me it at school and I still love it! ^__^

It was sad!
I was saddened.
As you have probably gathered.

i loved the little poem it was great i hope you write more like this one

so beautiful...

perfect represent tation of what we sasusaku fans hope for.

that was good :D