Aw . . . I liked this story, and what happened to Rachel was so sad . . . but it was sweet that Theo named his daughter after Rachel. Really sweet. Great fic!

Rachel died...that was to be expected I guess. At least she died with a good...err stabbed heart. One question I have is how would Theo react to Jaffar joining the army? The love that Rachel had for Theo came a little too fast I think. It wasn't really surprising that he went to Illia and ended up marrying Callista. Great job Chris...Great job...time to add to favs list. Hope you update Restoration soon.

Oh, man! Now I know what it's like to be left at a cliffhanger! (Note: I gotta stop 'cliffhanging'.). Update quick! I wanna see what happens next!

Ooh! Ooh! I want another chapter! Yay! This fic rocks! And hurry up- I updated Person's Unknown a while ago- what's going on? It's the Dragon's Gate!

I must say, it's quite a shame that there aren't more people reviewing this. I don't know if it's because of the lack of pairings, the OCs, or what, but it's certainly a fic worth reading.

I think I'm getting a bit repetitive with the OMG I LUVZ THIS STORY!1!! stuff, but even so, I feel like I should say again that you have a great writing style and the characterization here is brilliant The only place I felt it fell a bit flat was here: “I thought I was dead myself. But Nergal saved me.” but then as the scene went on I remembered that she was slightly morph-like at the moment and clearly wasn't acting like herself for part of the scene anyway because of the influence. I was a tad bit worried when she came to her senses that she was going to just abandon her views on not dishonoring Ilia and surrender to Eliwood's army, but that's not the case. I'm very intriqued about what will happen next.

Also, I liked how there was even more suspense created at the beginning of the chapter when it didn't start out with the peg knight confrontation right away. This kept me interested enough to keep reading--which I already was anyway. I also liked how the scene with Callista and Samuel ended. The end of it just speaks for itself.

I'm glad that you're updating so fast, and I'm looking forward to reading what happens next.

Sorry...I forgot to review last chapter...this came too soon. Anyway...it's kind of sad that she finally lost all thought of who she is. Of course, Nergal isn't the really sick type to sexually abuse your now submissive army members...Good thing too. I can never find anything wrong...or I'm not searching for it...GREAT JOB!

First of all, I admire how you write so much. I just can't bring myself to write every day unless it's for NaNoWriMo.

Second, this chapter is a great addition to the story. In particular I liked Nergal's explanation for not just killing Rachel; it was something I was curious about myself. You're also skilled at blending the OCs and canon characters to make it seem like they all belong in the same world. I thought Fiora was especially in character, and the tactition seemed much more realisitic than all the mary-sue/gary-stu tactitions that so many people are writing about.

Also, I noticed that Florina might have been stuttering just a tad more than she usually does, although considering the situation it doesn't seem unlike her. And to add a nitpick:
“There are no bodies.”

“Huh?” Fiora turned to the tactician, who was frowning. “What?”

“There are no bodies. Even if the vultures were to feed on the corpses, we would still see bones around. But there are no bodies around. Somebody was here before us and took all the dead away.”

The phrase "there are no bodies" seems overused here, although like I said, that's just a nitpick and isn't necessarily so anyway.

Very suspenseful cliffhanger. I will be waiting for the peg knight confrontation eagerly.

I think this is a really interesting idea you have going here. I usually don't read OC stories, as so many of them are unrelated to canon, but this fit well and even reference actual units in-game (I believe it was Chapter 19x?). Rachel and Callista are well-developed characters. Fiora's appearance was well-timed and she was in character as well. The end bit with Nergal was intriguing, and I'm curious as to what will happen next with Rachel as a morph. I'm also curious as to what Fiora's going to do, if anything.

Sorry for the lack of concrit/suggestions...I, as usual, really can't think of anything to improve. So I'll just add a nitpick, which is the only thing I can find:
"Fiora had been her friends"
Friends should not be plural.

It's great finding something so unique among the fanfics. Action/Adventure stories are usually written so much less than Angst/Romance/Tragedy plus the occasional parody. As well, I find Ilia to be an interesting country.

Where the hell do you get these ideas? a Magical hat with a ** load of ideas...and how do you have the time to write them all. Your not half as lazy as I am..or the rest of the people that have entered your action/adventure writing contest. Awesome story...I so want to see Rachel betray Nergal...or quite the opposite could happen...in fact...just about anything could happen to her..Nergal gives her more power to be loyal..she owns Vaida...she should probably keep her personality like Sonia does. Good luck on future chapters.