Creepy. Eerie. Unsettling. Really powerful.. good for Sarah, leaving him.

Wow. That's intense. Awesome. ;)

It's nice to read a piece where he ISN'T the romantic, misunderstood character
(not that I dont enjoy those lol). "A baptism by fire into a world of dark passions and physical lust." was truly poetic, I really love it.

...No! THAT'S NOT HOW IT'S S'POSED TO END! -sobs uncontrolably-

I'd beg you to make a sequel, but I think a sequel would ruin it.

Beautifully tragic. Poor Sarah. Poor Jareth. Poor Hoggle!

How beautifully traging. How wonderfully sad. Truly a work of art. Based on a true story? My heart bleeds in their honor. Be it yours or some one elses.

I like it. All sorts of implied psychology and I really like the way you mirror the beginning in the end.

He did say "Fear me, love me, do as i say and i will be your slave" and that's exactly what she got.
I loved every moment of it. Not sure who to feel sorry for, but very good

*Wipes the tears from her eyes* This is a great story :)

This is a really good and powerful. You had me on the edge of my seat throughout the whole thing! Great work! :)

Wow, this is a really powerful piece, I like it very much. You have a lovely writing style.

Nice work!