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Ayiz
2009-11-27 . chapter 61
Heey I really love your fic it actully made cry at one point...I whish I culd write like that I hope your end is good
GRX3m0m
2009-11-25 . chapter 7
Loved it!
GRX3m0m
2009-11-25 . chapter 6
Nice :D.
GRX3m0m
2009-11-25 . chapter 5
Great.
GRX3m0m
2009-11-25 . chapter 4
Love it.
GRX3m0m
2009-11-25 . chapter 3
Perfect.
GRX3m0m
2009-11-25 . chapter 2
Great as always.
GRX3m0m
2009-11-25 . chapter 1
That was great!
omh666
2009-11-23 . chapter 56
The answer you have at the end of this chapter doesn't make sense. If the house was put back under the charm then Harry shouldn't be able to find it in the chapter where he gives his brother the protective stone. No one had told him where the house was and you can't say that "he was family so it didn't matter" because in the book Bella wasn't able to find the order's hq because it was under the same charm but she was family. Also keep in mind the family tree that we see in book 5. It shows that all the pure blood families are related some how thus if you say that family members didn't need to get the secret from the keeper then pretty much anyone could bypass the charm.
omh666
2009-11-23 . chapter 55
I would like to offer my congrats. I almost NEVER see a story with Harry being bad **, but not overly powerful and still have emotions play a large part of the story. This is a damn good story and I thank you for writing it as well as posting it for others to read it.
omh666
2009-11-22 . chapter 39
About the idea of horcruxes and the number 7. I've read a lot of people's views on the subject saying that it might verry well be that after 7 the soul is just not able to stand being ripped apart anymore and will make the person unstable. So that agrees with your idea of 7 being the max. The only thing that I've seen to argue against the idea of 7 being the max is how Voldemort turned Harry in to a horcrux. However I doubt that it was really a full horcrux and even if it were can't it be said that it might have made Voldemort a little unstable when it happened? Also to comment on your choice of wording. The horcrux is the container for the part of soul. So If your saying that Voldemort can only make 7 "horcruxes" then he would have split his soul in to 8 parts not 7 sense 1 part would still be in his body which follows the book's idea and goes with my statement which was written earlier in this review. I love the story and am looking forward to finishing reading it. Thank you for writing it and more over for posting it on here for people to read it.
omh666
2009-11-22 . chapter 25
James punching the ** out of Moody is no ** where near the punishment that he should have had to face. I hope your going to do more than just that after the ** that Harry just got put through.
omh666
2009-11-21 . chapter 13
I would just like to ask. How ** stupid do you think Harry is? Better question is. How stupid are you making him in this fic? You have a bath room connected to the bedroom he is in from what you tell us. You had him go in to the bathroom when the Potters first were there while he was awake. Now are you telling me that Harry wouldn't think of drinking water from the sink to stay alive? I mean I understand not drinking or eating anything made by the order, but how is it that he never thought to drink from the sink to at the least stay alive?
omh666
2009-11-21 . chapter 6
I'd like to point out to you. In an earlier chapter you said that Harry would be starting his 6th year and that he would be 16. Then in this chapter you mention that Hermione is the new 5th year prefect. That means that she is a year yunger than he is or that you simply forgot about which year you were placing the story in. I just figured I'd point it out and ask which it is.
AramilOniasha
2009-11-20 . chapter 13
I have several questions about your story.
First, how did hermoionie get introduced into the group? Without harry, she would not have befriended ron, as he was extremly insulting towards him.
Second, why did the map sho HArry James Potter, that is not his name, It was changed to Hary Marvalo, thus the map would show Harry Marvelo
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